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Hi My studies about Forms led me to a variety of dances: waltz, mazurka, polonaise ... (and a lot of variants). I have also been studying the base of Bartok's Axial Harmony System. I won't comment anything about it, it's too long. Anyeay this piece is a song with trio combining traditional tonal harmony with Bartok's dodecaphonic tonal (and functional) harmony.

It is absolutely gorgeous. Just after one listen I don't have much else to say than that. Gorgeous melody and harmony. Very full sound. My only simple, initial criticism is your ending seemed very abrupt. It did not seem appropriate. Some very lovely builds and swells, but that final line and the staccato just didn't jive in the melodic sense of things to my ear.

To expand on this, while parallel voice-leading can very occasionally work (see for example Tavener: God Is With Us), it is almost always used as an effect and not to produce a full choral sound (which I think you're striving for). More complicated voice-leading often makes the writing sound both fuller and more interesting; the so-called "rules of voice-leading" (i.e. no parallel 5ths or 8ves, double the root of the chord etc.) exist because they help produce a good sound in practice. Hope this helps!

This has a nice minor key feel to it, and you're right. A part of it is that strong V-1 pull. But maybe you should reduce the number of these cadences a bit, so that when they do happen they will have a greater impact. The listener will appreciate them more. A few tricks I do when experimenting - and that's what Danish and Sojar have suggested - is transpose. Take it out of the key. Do it in chunks or phrases. Like if you have vi-ii-V progression, you could transpose on the vi, the ii or the V. Now the listener is off. He doesn't know what you're doing. But if your melody is good, he's interested, he's invested. The feeling is still elegiac, and he's confident that you're confident that the tonic will arrive after a spell. And if you do that much, and can repeat it, Man, there isn't anything you can't do. I think perhaps you didn't trust yourself enough to go out of the key?