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Actually I think the octaves at some point were exagerated, but good rhythm construction. I dont feel the melody travelling as much I think it should be but some chord progressions were very good, specially that part when the octaves stop. Good job and continue composing!

I agree with M about the arc. This work is reminiscent of Michael Nyman's score for The Piano, which itself was static in the long haul. But he wasn't encumbered by the bass line you chose. I think you could keep almost everything here as is, but change up the bass line and simply reduce the number of repetitive octaves and replace them with anything but. A minor 9th, here and there perhaps. But in general I like it.

It's clever the use of broken octaves to be a heartbeat, compared to Stauss's "Death and Transfiguration" with constant syncopation, at least that's how I interpreted it. There are a lot of clever chord progressions thrown about in here, which I really appreciate. However, I would suggest adding more of an arc with the music. It dynamically remains at about the same level and the texture stays about the same throughout the entire piece. And I understand how ostinato is a good way to convey your message, but I think it can really go places, since you have such a great template here. Cheers!

Right off the bat, you clash a D# with E. I get what you're doing, but maybe make it a little less obvious. 0:37, important that the suspension of the piano happens relatively quickly, since the envelope of the piano sound is so percussive. At the transition to 16th's, the sparse texture of the right hand to the left is a bit strange... supplement it with 8th's maybe. Up to you. 1:20, clashing E with E#. Same around 2:40 and 3:49 and 5:00 Around 4:25, the B in the soprano with A#'s as a neighboring tone is a bit harsh, especially with the B also in the bass. I want a climax! Rising/falling actions. It's a lot of repeating, with not many chord progression changes. Like, it's definitely pretty, but so retrained. I know this can go more places. :) test it out, maybe. Cheers!