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I like the piece, but it confuses me. It sounds like a struggle between baroque and romantic style, a little bit of freeform harmony. It’s mostly fine, but the parts where the melody is a repeated note at the typical “straight volume” just don’t seem to work. I’d recommend either altering the melody to where it has an arc, or (and this would probably be better) adding some dim, cresc, back and forth through that section, and returning to flat volume at the more baroque parts. Just my two cents. Thanks for sharing ☺️

It sounds better than the sound options I have available for piano, at any rate. Mine are so bad, I tend to replace piano with harp or guitar for the sound file. You could take a little time to massage the tempo or add some accents, though, and it would add a lot to the impression of the playback. Did you have a pdf of the score for this that we can look at? It's easier to give specific feedback when we can cite measure numbers and see how everything relates to everything else.

I don't mean to be cruel, it's just that the MIDI performance was so bad to my ears that I could not even comment on the lines you wrote. I'm very sorry.

Hi Roberto, It's just practice, patience and perseverance. You're doing really well so just experiment and see what happens. I personally take quite a while to write a piece, a month at least or even two until I'm really happy with it. The piano sonata "Lily" which you commented on, took me two months from start to finish. The ideas come quite quickly at times, but then you have to put meat on the bones and edit and alter and tidy up etc., these things don't happen over night. Take your time, and above all, enjoy what you do. Mark

Hi eternum, You have some interesting harmonies going on here, but I would urge you to experiment a bit more with the left hand. For what it is, it's not bad, but you could do so much more with it, it's quite rhythmically static at the moment. Also, you don't really develop your melodies to their full extent. Try playing it backwards, upside down, keeping the rhythm but changing to notes, keeping the notes but changing the rhythm, there's lots you can do to broaden melodic elements into a better, fuller piece. I listened to your waltz also, and it suffered from the same lack of development. That's not to say your ideas are bad, they're not, only that each time you start a new round of the first or second themes, they remain much the same as the first round. I would take both of these pieces and see how many different ways I could change the themes, and vary also the left hand parts. The left hand should never really be "just" an accompaniment, it should also have a life of it's own if possible. These are some of the things that make music more interesting, and in that process, you will also learn a lot about what is and what is not possible. I hope you don't mind my comments, it's just my opinion, but if you do try some of my suggestions, I'm sure you would have fun, and produce some really interesting music. Good luck Mark

I don't have much time, here are two things I noticed: 1. Your dynamics should have a sharper change. It never moves above F or below MP. If you want a static piece (it should be a static dance I think?) then fine, but keep that in mind. 2. A waltz, as far as I know, should be in 3/4. Look what you did: For many years I didn't know the difference between 6/8 and 3/4. After all, in maths, 6/8 and 3/4... are the same thing! But here it's different. Look at the way the bar is separated. 6/8 separates it to two threes, while 3/4 separates it to three twos. It also sounds like 3/4. So- change the time signature to 3/4 and the way the eights are separated into three groups of two instead two groups of three. Good luck.

I actually quite like this but as Luis said, at the speed you have it, much of it is actually practically unplayable by real musician. If you wanted to have someone play this, you would have to revise the left hand part quite a bit. Are you a pianist? One of the things you should always take into account when composing a piece is "can a person actually play this"?

It's interesting and "energetic". I think this kind of piece would benefit from more detailed accents and dynamics. You better find a top pianist because of thouse quickscales, octaves and chords.

OMG I would change the left hand pattern somewhere. I know a prelude is something short, but the speed and the hammering of this left hand is a bit too much. Surely the fact that there are no dynamics doesn't help, although it has a baroque feeling (where dynamics were sparse). The figure or motif in the middle and low voice in m. 6-7 doesn't work very well. Also, those thick chords in m. 53, 54, 65 are not in the mood of this neobaroque style.

Well yes I did find something beautiful in it, very evocative. Simple, but effective. Not sure if I really felt it was hopeful, but perhaps that's just me, but definitely dreamlike.