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Could you please review my new tune created in Ableton live lite

Hello everyone! Here is a waltz for flute and piano that I recently composed. There are three main sections and the whole piece follows the form ABCB'A after a really brief introduction. B acts as a short bridge between the two main parts, A and C, which follow a more strict waltz rhythmic pattern. Roughtly, the tonality during the segments are: A: Dmaj | B: Dmaj to Amin | C : Amin to Amaj | B': Dmaj | A: Dmaj. It is my first piece in this style and I am not sure how to translate the four part writing theory I have been studying to a melody and piano accompaniment texture. I tried my best but there are probably many mistakes. Any advice or feedback is appreciated! Hope you enjoy it and thanks for listening!

Hi Aditya. Up to the 30 second mark the simple melodic and harmonic ideas have a certain catchy-ness to them that I enjoy. After that there are a couple places where you seem to over-complicate your music. 1:30 is a place where the melodic line just goes all over the place and it seems to make no musical sense to me. The tempo change you have at around 1:10 is a welcome contrast. Thanks for the music!

Very lush and rich harmonies. Somehow I don't get tired of your repeated use of those arpeggios. It's a common way of writing for piano but you didn't over do it. You end your piece on a bVI if I'm not mistaken. It's not that you have to end on the tonic chord to make it sound complete but I think in this instance it's begging for some kind of greater release. Have you tried ending on a IV?

Beethoven was also obsessed with those dotted rhythms that you use in this. It's just a shame that you use the dotted rhythms so insistently only in the piano without letting the cello see any of that in its part. Another technique that you might consider using on the cello is spiccato. But in order to do that you would have had to write some sixteenth-note runs for it or maybe employ that dotted rhythm in its part. Either way there is still plenty of rhythmic variation you could apply to this and maybe some faster motivic ideas.

@Sepharite You might like. Your piece sounds like a very specific one in this soundtrack I can't manage to recall, but if you listen you might find out yourself.

And I think it's a shame when a talented composer feels pressured to write in a style other the one he or she enjoys. I don't care one whit whether I'm hearing Simen N, or Sojar Voglar; I want to hear good music - which, of course, is something that both of you invariably provide.

I had been thinking we could set up some sort of small "label", or something that would give our pieces of music a life of their own besides here in the forum. Perhaps we could get some institutions (universities, etc.) to back this up and se if we can create a small net of composers, one that spams beyond the forum, and that can create a few oportunities career-wise.