Thank you indeed, Tom. Your suggestions and commentary are so welcome and I'll definitely think about it being part of a suite. I feel in a Honegger Pacific 231 mood right now but thwarted because of a software issue for which I need support! Re your first point, yes, perhaps there could be more dramatic pauses, ralls and so on. I tend to work to a fixed tempo in the DAW (that has to fit the grid ready for engraving) and am so a-rhythmic anyway that I try to control the pace in durations in the DAW. It's a habit I need to change; also altering the time signatures bar to bar to make reading easier.
Again, thanks.
Some most appreciated compliments there, Peter. I do try with the rendering - never cheat (like push the volume fader up or down to get balance. Once the "standard" mf is set for an instrument any change is done through velocity). Like you I initially work on paper then go to Reaper which I like because I can have one editor for the whole project. I'm glad the piece made sense at least. Perhaps night is the sleep of a tortured day! (Working with some of this software of late rather tortures my soul I must admit!)
Atlantis, hi, and many thanks for that. One of the reasons I divide my strings into 9 parts is that I tend to work in 5 or 6 part harmony here and there - it can lead to over-dense textures but it also allows me to add non-harmony notes that cause the dissonances. The comments generally inspire me to think of a short film depicting aspects of late dusk and nightfall. Interesting that you mention Vaughan Williams. I'm no great fan generally except of his 5th, 6th and 7th Symphonies and there might be a slight connection with the last movement of his 6th although hopefully not as morbid!
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