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Some lovely thematic and harmonic ideas/material here. I hear it also as a possible orchestra movement. There's lots of opportunity to create a rich texture. Mark

I was just getting ready to say that...it may even work as a concerto. I can hear the melody being played on a flute, clarinet, or even alto or tenor sax. This piece is incredibly beautiful. I enjoyed the main theme's thin texture, as it allowed the harmony to shine. You said the A and B sections were both a little long, but I didn't mind the length at all. You create a very somber mood 1)through your key choice...Em and your harmonic rhythm is very fluid it feels natural - you adjust it in some spots for emphasis, but overall it feels nice. As a pianist, I want to play this piece lol

I don’t know if this answers your question, but I have read somewhere (I forgot where) that in some points of some movements of Rachmaninoff’s All night vigil op 37 there was even 7 (maybe it was six but I don’t remember) part writing. You could try to investigate that.

Hello @JorgeDavid, I find this piece really sorrowful and melancholic and I wouldn’t have been able to tell that you are not used to write slow pieces in minor if you hadn’t mentioned it. I find main theme specially beautiful in its simplicity, with a thin texture, driving harmony and a powerful message of desperation. I find it a perfect theme (and I emphasise the word perfect) theme to write a theme and variations piece. It has lots of opportunities to be transformed in so many different ways. I can think of: a quasi baroque flowing melody in a single line (something like this) form which could emerge other different lines, a climactic chordal bell-like passage, a complete nocrturne-like transformation to major, an even darker somber version in the deep register with minor chromatic mediants, a driving syncopated dramatic march, a triumphant transformation. And possibly, with such a versatile theme you can do practically everything. Maybe if you agree for your music to be taken to create a variations piece and @chopin wants, a competition similar to the Brahms lullaby one could be done by youngcomposers I also like the harmonic language that you employed here, chromatic, but still clearly tonal, typical from the romantic period. You could try experimenting with augmented and half diminished chords to create even more expression (sorry if you have done this and I haven’t seen it)