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Thank you so much for listening and commenting @PeterthePapercomPoser! I am really glad you liked it! You are right, the F chord was notated really badly! Since I might have to re-record everything soon I transcribed the audio into a sheet score today (I had not written it down and I was starting to forget the notes so I wrote it down for not forgetting them 😅) and I needed to notate the chords in the score too, since there is an improvised section. So I corrected that F chord into an Fmaj13(#11). Thank you for letting me know! You are right, the main reason I used the synth pad was because the string sounds are really really bad in my digital piano. I have a Yamaha P-515, which I really love but, among one of its cons, is the fact that there are not many midi sounds available and most of them are quite bad. Since synth sounds are normally okay in any keyboard I selected those. However, the short film is set in an industrial neighborhood of a large modern city, so the synth sound does not sound too bad in the context. Yes, I played all of this by myself. But it is not particularly hard to play. The main problem were the slides because I had not played guitar for a long long time so the "hard-skin" of my left-hand fingers is totally gone and they did hurt quite a lot. In general the fingers from the left hand were hurting for the whole time 😅 As when I play piano, I tried to compensate the lack of technical virtuosity with expressive playing but in many places I made mistakes :S. Also there was an improvised part and I am not good at improvising so you can tell I am doubting a lot while playing that section. If I re-record it I will try to play it exactly the same but without mistakes or doubtful notes! Thank you so much for commenting!

Hi @JorgeDavid! Very beautiful recording and rendition! I personally feel like the electronic dark pad synth could be switched out for string orchestra. But that is just my own personal taste and I have a bias toward acoustic instruments. I also think that the synth gives the piece a bit of an 80's or 70's vibe and if it were my composition I would want to avoid that connotation. But I don't know what your intent was with using the synth. This way you've written out the chords is a bit confusing. Are you talking about and F# chord with an added 4th and 6th? Or an F chord with an added #4 and 6th? I can tell from listening to the music that you mean the latter but it's just written confusingly. I think you have done a wonderful job with what you have! I guess your choice of synth was required by your friend wanting it all recorded on real instruments? In that case, if your digital piano doesn't have good string sounds then the synth would be preferable. Thanks for sharing and congrats! Did you play this all yourself?

Personally, I think this is very well done, albeit short, it's got a good technicality to it, that could be used as a skill-check or audition piece for a pianist! Reading through this, and being an intermediate - amateur piano-player (I dare not call myself a pianist... lol I only know piano well enough to teach a grade school child how to read hot cross buns, place their hands properly, and play using both hands while reading both clefs. Other than that, my skills in piano are lacking, but I understand it, at least! lol) It appears to be very challenging, and on top of that, sounds like it would be a blast to play, once rehearsed properly. I don't see, off of a quick first-time read-through, anywhere that needs attention, from a technical stand point. I'm also an autodidact composer, so I may be overlooking some things, but all-in-all, I don't believe anyone reading this to play it would have a hard time comprehending what's written. I think you've done well 🙂

This is a beautiful piece! I particularly like the harmony in bar 13. The B-flat of the violin and the A of the cello creates a wonderful melancholic feeling. However, I think (as other people have noted ) that you should do something about the accented half-notes (f) in bar 16 and 32. I would simply remove them all together. I could even imagine to also remove the pizz. note in bar 8. I am of the opinion that the piece stands well on its own. You might consider expanding the piece with a short intermediate, more joyful part before returning to the initial phrase. This would give an even stronger melancholic/sentimental impact. But this is just my personal idea. The piece is also very good without such an addition.

Glad you liked it! I love his chamber and solo piano works. "On an Overgrown Path" for piano captures the same feel as the Idyll. Check it out. His open, light scoring and idiosynchratic /unusual melodic sense creates a one of a kind effect. Your piece captures this. Yes, ABA as you lay out would be great. Glad to see you are open to changing the dynamics for the "dramatic" break. If you keep an eye to preserving the mood, many things might work quite well. Cant wait to see the finished product! Good luck!