Hello Kyle,
Thank you so much for this detailed post. I very much appreciate the fact that you clarified issues with notation, since that will help me a lot with the engraving process(which is not my forte at all). The solo at bar 32 has actually modulated to C sharp minor but I see your point on overloading the players with too many sharps. Will definitely revise my score for the rhythm you've mentioned, because there are probably a few other spots with this notation problem.
Very glad you enjoyed this piece, you can always check out more works in my YC profile(recently made a corny about section). I shall get to listening to your recent work too.