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Hello peeps, Merry belated Christmas and happy upcoming New Year. I recently wrote this work based on a popular theme that has been surfacing on Tik-Tok and Instagram. It usually appears on slow-mo reels or funny fails in general. I thought the theme had quite a bit of potential and decided to write a short orchestral fantasia based on it. I apologize if the score is a little hard to follow. I am planning to work on engraving after I receive more feedbacks. Thanke Truly Final Version + Animation

Revisited this piece, after a few weeks off of messing with it. That always seems to give me a fresh perspective on things I've written, and helps me to identify areas where improvement could be made. I feel confident in saying that if I were to forget this piece, and return to it again, that I'd be happy with how it is in it's current state. As always, if there are any areas where someone with more expertise than I have is able to identify an issue or mistake, I'm all ears for the feedback! 🙂 Thanks, and I hope you all enjoy my little heartfelt piece of music Lamentation_-_Kyle_Hilton_UPDATED_with_Spitfire_Labs_VST3_Audio (4).pdf Lamentation_-_Kyle_Hilton_UPDATED_with_Spitfire_Labs_VST3_Audio.custom_score (1).mp3

Hi everyone, this is a rather simple piece. I hope you enjoy ~

The development took a lot of work xD so I'm glad you like it! I'll try your suggestion out. I'm not sure which part you're calling the "Beethovanian hopeful theme" tbh. Do you mean b. 154 to the retransition? Anyway, I could probably incorporate some Theme 1 motifs in the accompaniment to add some drama 🤯 and excitement like you said. I think I agree. My first draft was even worse with the end, and I thought I fixed it, but as I've listened to it more and more, it's hit me that it still doesn't feel earned. Whereas something like my Seven Sorrows piece, the end feels much more deserved, even if it's musically much less mature than this piece, it still does better in that respect. What will be tricky is how I'm going to fix this issue. I could have like a collapse immediately after the recap maybe. Or I could just get rid of the 2nd theme as it currently is in the recap and have this final triumph take place of it. I think just having it come immediately after the same theme is what makes it feel unearned. Like it was already there, no reason for the triumph. I'll figure something out haha. When I do I'll just post the finished piece to my youtube so I'm not bothering this site with more of this same piece xD

Hello ComposaBoi, I was meaning to comment on this a while ago, but procrastination really got the better of me(as is the case with too many endeavors). Apologize for my indolence. I wanted to say that the last movement particularly touched me; the final full iteration of the theme is quite heartfelt especially after all the dissonance you've introduced. My only real concerns lie in the 3rd movement and your harmonic writing for the fast sections. For the former, the violin accompaniment in the first section seems to overlap with the main theme at times. I would be careful about balance issues since it could prove difficult to discern the melody. As for the latter, Henry gave you a suggestion on this too, maybe you could try modulating to other keys, use secondary dominants or even apply modal mixture. I would also check a few part writing details, cuz some dissonances seem too jarring in the context of the work.(but it's totally up to you if you'd like to keep it that way) Anyways, this is already quite well-thought out compositionally, given the fact that it's based on only a few themes. Your writing, in general, also feels quite personal, which is always interesting for me to hear. Consider me a follower

Hey Peter, I like the 2nd movement! For me this one sounds like Bartok-- the famous pizzicato movement of his String Quartet no.4, but yours is more exotic when microtones are introduced! I just hope the Scherzo would be much longer haha. I love those faxbourdon parallels in b.4-5 and 8-11. Thx for adding a new movement! Henry

HI @kaiyunmusic, I like the simplicity of the music. With the falling bass it makes me think of the great music by in the animation "Spirited Away" Thx for sharing! Henry

Hi @Mooravioli, Given what @UncleRed99 and Peter have said, I almost have nothing to add. I usually don't like microtones at all, but the beginning microtones really make the music more like in the other world! Your use of harp, and also the twirling figure like in b.80 really sounds like ocean waves. I think so too, it sounds vivacious here like the oceanic habitat for me. For me I would hope the piece to last a bit longer! The ending doesn't seem conclusive to me, though it's a magical way to end all of a sudden. Thx for sharing! Henry

Hey Jonathon, I'm gonna finish this with the final movement! The beginning immediately reminds me the beginnings of the 1st movement with the same theme. I really like the marching character of the 1st theme! The usage of brass here is great for me. I really like the development! The voice excahnge between the different groups of instruments is great and I like your modulations. Maybe just fill in the gap in b.108-109 by the timpani would be greater! I think the Beethovanian hopeful theme after it is a bit too long because of the slow tempo, which hinders the excitement of the development! Maybe add some exciting accompaniment below the winds would be a great idea? I think the retransition to the 1st theme is well prepared here. I think the trimuph to b.265 is a bit abrupt, since I think the D minor struggle is not portrayed long and tragic enough to make the conquering of it powerful! It's like the final boss is just a Slime to be defeated for me! The D major trimuph is great for me though. I think you can change the key signature to D major here too. Thx for sharing this massive work to us! I appreciate your having grand plan in your works! Henry

Thank you very much! Yes, it is a nice way to start this new account. I feel the same way! The noise tone of the harmonics gives it a chill windy feeling. I agree, I will extend that dark section a bit so the return to A' feels more luminous. Thank you for the feedback man! I'll try to be more active next month and hopefully help revive this community. Yes, that piece by debussy inspired some of the sonorities of this piece. 🙂 The double glissandos with harmonics should be possible, although the bowing might be very challenging. However the glissando in direct motion that leads to a perfect 5th should be impossible and the violinist should try to simply fake it as better as they can. It's a very difficult piece for the violin anyways, so I don't know if it will be performed anytime soon. Also the piano part is very weird and many pianists would find it annoying I believe.

It is a beautiful piece. It sounds totally Debussy. I think the treatment of the piano all the time in quasi-percussive mode, except at some points like at the end, detract a bit. It reminds me a lot of Cathédrale Engloutie. A different matter is the violin. I guess you have mastered its possibilities... Those glissandos with harmonics and glissandos in opposite directions...., are possible. I imagine they are. Regards.

Hey @Ivan1791, Congrats on your first piece in your new account! I like the piece. You make use of a lot of quartal and quintal chords, both as melodically and harmonically. They really give breath to the music just like sunshine. I love your “modulation” in b.12. Those high violin double stoppings, and especially those with artificial harmonics, sound like breeze to me. The ending p just sounds like water drops to me. Personally I think the section could be extended to be a contrasting passage given the different dissonance level there and how different it is with the remaining passages. Also I think maybe it can reach forte or even louder, instead of just mf. Thx for sharing and welcome back! Henry