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Hello dear friends young composers. Little music scribbled at the beginning of the year always on my dear and dear Jules Laforgue, too soon died of phtisia at the age of 25 it seems to me. Always his biting irony. Again, he takes as a witness the moon that never responds, remains cold, like a Rose of the basilica of silence that is the night. In French, the hidden games of meaning are absolutely fascinating, and the metric of the poem itself gives me a feeling of incantation or at least of scansion. I would even say that we touch on certain expressionist images when Laforgue evokes the head of Jean-Baptiste absent from the dish that is the moon! This poet has not been set to music to my knowledge. So I have dared for several years my little experiments by trying to serve him sincerely. I added an English translation in subtitles, but I'm not sure it can be totally respectful of the black magic of this text. Good listening and do not hesitate to criticize!

I'm loving your voice and singing! It does feel sad, like someone is sighing? but I don't understand your text I have to admit it goes over me... is it a love song? also the way you produced it is incredible!

What a fantastic work. It certainly sounds like film music, a symphonic poem or something similar. The themes and the beautiful orchestration totally evoke that futuristic atmosphere you mention. The part with percussion instruments is one of my favorites.

My first instinct is - what mode should this be in? If a tango, then I might assume it's actually in four sharps. Try your left-hand motif such that the notes are F# C# A C# and you'll hopefully hear what I mean. Otherwise, what you're creating is simply a rhymic drone of sorts*, using I and V. Therefore, I think you might need to establish what mode you're in and correct my assumption. The title of your piece says Arabian, so I suspect you want to allude to the locrian mode. How might you esablish that? (Or, if not the locrian mode, then how might you establish what you do intend? There are, of course, more options than simply the locrian mode.) *I very much like rhythmic drones - too many composers go off on so many tangents far too often for my liking!

There is a thread from WAAAAY back on this forum - I don't know if it's still here. It sort of discussed the topic here, though in different terms. I think from a DSM understanding (now DSM V) of what Narcissism is, I would catagorically say no, creativity can't and won't lead to narcissism. It's an explorative and iterative process rather than a pathway to anything - especially not narcissism! By the way, if anyone here thinks that they might be narcissistic and are worried about that... then worry not; the chances of you being narcissistic AND questioning yourself about it are incredibly small. A narcissist won't ask that of themselves. Finding balance in reviewing one’s work is essential and therefore there is a requirement: listen to your own work! Don't overindulge though. Keep balanced. (Would you just eat from the shrubbery?) Do listen to your own music. Analyse. Self-review. Be constructive. And then move on. (But re-visiting preiodically is good and healthy.) [Edited for terrible spelling msitkeaklsed.]

Hey @General Pokopo! 1) LoL I didn't know that cats could play drums. Usually starting a piece with this much heavy drumming is a big turn off for me because its obvious to me as the listener that it's not a real drummer playing the drum set so unless it's some awesomely humanized drum fill/solo that starts the song off with a bang then I perceive it as kinda like a bummer/let-down. This is another one of those songs that seems to be based almost completely on the drums as the center stage instrument, and if it's not awesome it's going to disappoint the listener who expects the drummer to really kick-ass. If the drums weren't the focus of the song then they wouldn't be as important to be realistic though. 2) This is a different style than the first track - what I perceive as more of a electronica/glitch-fest drum loop type of thing. This is really far from the kind of music I usually listen to so I don't know that there's much constructive criticism that I can give. 3) I like that the drums aren't the focus in this one even though they're still present. This does have more melodic substance than the others. It seems like in your pieces, if the drums aren't the focus of the track, then you don't know what to focus on. Maybe try writing a piece for a solo monophonic instrument and a polyphonic instrument to back it up (like piano, guitar, harp or any keyboard instrument, even celesta or marimba or vibraphone or something). I think if you have only 1 solo instrument and 1 accompanying instrument it might force you to focus. Or maybe you already know how to do that and it's just not obvious in these particular pieces. If that's the case then feel free to ignore. Thanks of sharing!

Hi @Krisp! The octave major 3rd's in the piano that permeate your piece remind me of some Rachmaninoff piece for two pianos or perhaps Debussy! I've actually written a song titled "Ennui" about the corona-virus pandemic/lockdown and your song reminded me that it's actually a French word! LoL I think this might just be one of the most simple and because of that, accessible songs of yours you've ever written! The song is really charming and I can imagine it in a film. The string writing is also very affecting in combination with the piano and the voice. Well done and thanks for sharing!

Hello @Chemathmusician0510 and welcome to the forum! From what I can glean from the score PDF, you spend most of the piece on the dominant without ever resolving to B major (what I am assuming is the tonic even though there seems to be plenty of evidence from the D naturals in the piece that you might be in B minor instead or maybe just borrowing). Can you provide an mp3 rendering of the piece to give people a better idea of what the piece might sound like? Thanks for sharing!