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Hi Derek, you have uploaded your piece and arranged everything very nice, but you need to have a clear melody that captures the attention of the listener. Listen to .Fredrik

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Terrible rendering, and fast running notes cannot replace a real melody! You need to calm down and listen to the masters, like father Haydn and Beethoven!

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Like I said to Simen, where is the theme of motif? I don't hear any distinct melody, just rythmically formatioins of chords, even though they sometimes progress chromatically, they don't lead to any interesting climax. This is important, if you want to keep the listeners attention. Well, I have listened after all, Fredrik

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That's the best twinkle I have ever heard before!! Great Norby, I feel that my words are not exagerated at all when I listen to this sophisticated version of a melody that otherwise never has given me the thrills, LOL! :cool: Keep the sparkle alive! Fr

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