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Hi there, thanks for the comment! It is very helpful that you pointed out all of these discrepancies! I shall try to correct them. What do you suggest I do to create a more focused sound?

Thank you very much. Yes, I was a bit sceptical about the rallentando and the organ's volume. I will proceed to revise them. I hope the piece is okay harmonically speaking? My former teacher spoke about my excessive use of thirds in harmony. Thanks again ^_^

Sorry about that. Fixed!!

Hello again This is my second stab at choral music. I was inspired to write my own version of a 'Magnum Mysterium' after listening to several versions from different periods (Poulenc, Victoria, Gjeilo, Lauridsen etc). Please excuse the metronome in the background, I forgot to remove that upon uploading x_x. And it should also be noted that certain tempo elements aren't how I would've noted them, but I put them there just for the sake of getting the playback to be as close as possible to what I wanted it to sound like. I hope you enjoy, and please feel free to criticize!!

Oh okay, thanks for the clarification. I see what you mean by that, and will work on making the parts a bit more cohesive. My intention was to play majorly on the density of the voices, and by having them doing different things, I'd hoped it would sort of add more depth to the depiction of the 'universal cry' idea, but perhaps it was a bit excessive. Thanks!

So do you suggest, in the name of conventionality, that I revise the ripieno parts? And concerning the tension, I tried to have a quasi-resolution of some sort in order to fully depict the begging/lamenting nature of the piece. Or would it be better to change them as you have suggested? And at which instances would I need to revise? And yes, I thought as much concerning the breath mark, but I assumed there would be some other sophisticated way of annotating this haha. And could you please explain further what you mean by 'focused'? Please forgive me if I'm supposed to know this, as I said, I don't really have that much of a formal education on the technicalities of composing. Thank you once again for your time! Thanks for the review! It really is a shame concerning the voices, but what can one do except manage haha! Yes, I was going for a dense sound because I wanted to depict a somewhat universal cry for forgiveness, so it's like lamentations of the world, hence the different entrances and periodic phrasing. I see your point concerning the prolonged fortes, and I'll make sure to revise this. Moreover, I see what you mean about the leaps with the "Ah"s, and will revise it as well. Once again, I thank you both very much for looking at this for me, as I need this piece revised so it can be presentable for my university arts supplement submission. Here is the sheet music once more in case you'd want to personally look at some more things to point out!

Hi guys! I literally just discovered this forum and am glad I actually made the effort to search for this. Being as I haven't really had that much of a formal education in composition (exclusively), it's great to have a platform like this where I can share ideas and seek advice on projects. Anyway, this is a piece I recently finished, and it is a cappella, written for a SSAATTBB choir (as you'll notice in the score ). This piece is very new territory for me because I experimented with the relationship between the two choirs quite a bit (so consider it as SATB1 and SATB2) and I hope it's okay. Moreover, being as I don't have a choir readily available to me, it's unfortunate that you'd have to listen to the MIDI audio, which honestly doesn't capture the entirety of my intentions for the piece, but it's all I can do for now. Please feel free to tell me what you think or ask any questions regarding the harmonic/melodic choices I made that may seem unconventional! I hope you enjoy it !! P.S: there's supposed to be a certain, short pause of some kind before the finishing note, but I wasn't sure how to notate this.