Good effort here! Nice main theme. A few things you could improve on: Avoid 2nd inversion chords; make sure the notes always fit the harmony - you have a D maj chord in the harpsichord at bar 12 but the notes in the upper parts do not fit (it should really be an A major chord here anyway); (optionally) add a double bass - it makes the bass line stronger; make sure to use conjunct motion - you sometimes skip a note and jump to a third or fourth, this is unstylistic; the piece seems to lose its way a bit towards the end, modulate to closely related keys only to begin with (G maj, A maj, E min, F# min, B min) - C maj/F maj are too far out; finally end in the same key you start!
- Anthony
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