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Thanks for listening and commenting, @Seni-G ! I am glad you found that it slowly built up. It was one of the main things I put effort on since it was such a short piece, and the addition of the Coda was mostly for that same reason, as I felt the piece needed a little extra build-up/release with the main quarter note motive. I really liked your idea of the accompaniment, specially I might experiment with it during the coda since that is where the rhythm is freer and most of the notes of all chords are static, so it is a good place for testing it out. Thanks for the idea! Thank you!

Thank you so much listening and the feedback, @Grant Weep ! I have been listening to the sections you said attentively and I think I know what you mean. Regarding the Bnat, I personally like it there, and I like that harmonic/melodic movement, but thanks to your comment I realized that I did too much crescendo there. I should be played only a little louder, but I play that crescendo to the Cmajor chord even louder than the Half Cadence. I think that might affect negatively the first section of the piece. I will try practicing that crescendo softer to see if, for the next time, I manage to make that part sound smoother and less out of place. Regarding the power chords, I used those there for inner melodic reasons. You are right that they sound a little hollow, but I think I like the one in m.11, but in m.15 I might add the third to the right hand for next version. Thanks for pointing those out! Yeah, that was an accident, but since it did not sound too bad I let it stay. I also think it sounds kind of nice the more I hear it. I will consider whether leaving it and maybe reusing the same idea somewhere else or getting rid of it! Thanks for the comment!

Hello everyone! I decided to wrap up and record at the piano a short waltz theme that I posted in the "incomplete works" forum recently. I found the theme quite complete by itself so I ended up adding only a coda (relatively long, so it works also as a second theme in some way). I also modified some harmonies, inner notes, and decreased the tempo quite a lot (from 120 to around 90) since I think the theme sounds better like that (and the coda would not work at a fast tempo). The sections are: m.1~16: A theme (antecedent) ending in HC m.17~32: A theme (consequent) ending in PC m.33~49: Coda (based in initial quarter note motive) I tried to record it in one go (instead of doing several takes and mixing them together) so I also share the video I took. I was planning to practice it for longer, but the trill is quite hard and I realized that if I want to play it perfectly, I probably need to go back to it in the future after several months. Also, I played it quite okay every time... until the camera was on, then random mistakes started happening hahaha. As a result there are some mistakes, particularly in the dynamics, trills, and in the coda, where I rushed too much (on top of that, I accidentally played a wrong note too). The audio for both the score and live videos are the same. Thank you and any feedback is more than welcome!

Thanks for the feedback, @MK_Piano ! As you commented, the exact repetition was too much so I added some variations and also moved the repeated melody an octave higher (with some instances of octave playing) for contrast. I also added more internal notes, improved the melody a little, and exchanged a couple measures for improving the flow of the theme. Thank you so much for these links! Specially, I was browsing through both of them yesterday and found them really insightful! As I commented, I did not try to imitate Ghibli sound in this theme (probably I used to many notes for that, since Hisaishi in Ghibli's films tend to stick to whole, quartet, and some eight notes) but I want to do it some day and that is why I am trying to learn his pieces in piano first. I will make sure to review the channels to understand the style better. Thank you!

-- EDIT: This piece has been completed. The complete version with live audio is in the following post --- Hello everyone! I composed today a really short waltz theme. I am practicing the "Merry-Go-Round" waltz from Joe Hisaishi at the piano and decided to use the initial harmony and melodic voice leading for composing a theme as an exercise (I used it only as an harmonic template and did not try to imitate the "Ghibli" sound). The first 7 measures use the exact same accompaniment and melodic voice leading. I tried experimenting a little bit with harmony, particularly in m.12~14 and m.28~30. I think the motive in m.2 might need to be notated with a trill (since I think it needs to sound more rubato and less rhythmic , but the trill in MuseScore sounds too bad so I notated like this). Hope you like it and any feedback is welcome! Thank you!

Yeah, that's the idea and one of the possible changes! However, in this version you changed the melody at the cadence right before. In this new version the melody at the end of the previous section soars higher than in the original one. I think, if you play the melody an octave higher, it is better to keep the melody prior to that in the same range as in the original version, since, otherwise, it breaks the novelty of the higher rang. You could also keep this new melodic ascend at the cadence and that might add some contrast for the entrance of the original melody you had in G5. Also, I think in both versions, one of the main issues is that the Cmin accompaniment chords are too loud. I would make those chords much softer and, in general make that whole section softer than the previous one (both melody and accompaniment, but specially the later). Thiis dynamic change could also help quite a lot.

Hello @Kvothe , thank you so much for all the feedback and glad you enjoyed the piece! You are right, I had not realized until you pointed it out. I decided to change those measures so I modified m.14 and similar measures so now the transition to the contrasting section of A is done without stopping the waltz rhythmic flow. I experimented a little bit with the harmony. In general I am happy with most progressions except for m.7~9 where I do the following harmonic progression: Db7 --> Bbaug/D --> Ebmin. It was a solution I came across for moving from Db7 to Ebmin while having an enharmonic common tone (F#-Gb) in the melody. Yes, I agree. Since I composed it as a short piece I tried to have fun with the main melody (not trying to write sentence, period or hybrid, which I did in the B section instead) but it came out too Jazzy. I do like it but I think it gets too chromatic too early (so I like it the main theme much more during the reprise than at the beginning, once the ear got used to it). I think it is okay for a short piece like this but I am trying to learn ways to "smooth" the way to chromatism in themes like this one. Thank you so much for all the feedback!

There is a key change but, I was meaning mostly the change of tessitura and texture (in that particular instance, besides changing the key, you leave large gaps between the accompaniment and the melody, which contrasts with the previous measures in which the G staff was clustered with notes). What I meant around 1:50 was not a modulation, but rather a change in tessitura for the melody. I might be wrong, but the same melody is played for the first time around the 00:59 mark, which, at the same time, is a variation of the main melody with which the piece starts. As a result, while my ear does not ask for a key change (the initial Cmin chords from m.34 sound perfectly nice to me), when the G5 sounds, yet once more, somehow my ear is tired of hearing the melody always in that range. I think, at that point, it would really make it much fresher playing the melody an octave higher or even in a bass (with the melody played below the Cmaj accompaniment chord), starting it in G6 or G3. For example, this is a fast draft I made of the initial measures when played an octave higher. Since the melody has already being played in around G5 for a few times, it might make it fresher going up an octave like this. The melody has some fast notes at times, so it cannot be played in octaves easily, but something like this might work at times. octave_melody.mp3 Hope it helps!

This is really lovely! I especially love the melodic ideas. However, I agree that it feels a little repetitive at times, particularly before 3:22. I listened without the score, so I can't give much feedback on the harmony itself. From a listener's perspective, I think the piece could benefit from a few more changes in texture here and there. Nothing too obvious, so as not to disrupt the contemplative mood. For example, I really loved the change of texture at 3:22. More moments like that, might help reduce the sense of repetition while still maintaining its contemplative flow. In particular, at 1:52, I found myself wanting to hear the melody an octave higher (perhaps doubled in octaves). As it stands, it presents a variation of the main theme in the same register, and my ears were asking for a change in tessitura at that point. This is really beautiful and an orchestral version would be so beautiful too! Orchestrating it would also give you lots of chances to add variety with the instrumental colors. Thanks for sharing!

Hi everyone! I composed this short waltz for piano today. I'm still practicing it, so for now I've used the sounds from MuseScore 4. It was inspired by Tchaikovsky's Album for the Young, Op. 39. The opening melodic motif is quite similar to that of No. 8, "Waltz," and I also used some harmonic progressions that I learned from No. 14, "Polka." While studying and practicing pieces from that album, I started wanting to compose several short piano pieces and create my own "Album for the Young." This is my first attempt. It is a waltz in B-flat major, although the tonal center shifts around quite a bit. The form is ABA', with A being the main waltz theme and B a slower lyrical brief section in Cmaj. As always, every feedback, comment or suggestion is more than welcome and hope you enjoy it! Thank you!

Thank you! I am glad you found the notation and layout satisfying as well. I had some troubles to notate the atonal accidentals in the atonal section and in the went for what looked more beautiful and easier to read when playing. I only composed one piece in Amaj a couple of years ago. From then on, somehow I have only been able to compose mostly pieces in minor 😅 Thanks again, @Churchcantor !

Thak you so much @SergeOfArniVillage , I am really glad you liked it! I also considered mixing both sections but, to be honest, the main reason I started with the tonal section was because I lacked skills and ideas to keep the atonal section going. So before mixing atonal and tonal ideas I think I will need to learn much more about atonality (what makes it work and different techniques). Thanks for commenting!

Thank you so much, @Churchcantor , I am really glad you enjoyed it! I had my doubts at first with those sections with the A-E against Eb-Ab, so it is nice to hear that it works! Thanks for listening and commenting!

Hello everyone! This weekend I experimented with a really simple atonal technique and I turned the experiment into this piece for piano. The technique is "mirror writing". I applied it in the simplest way possible. The process was the following: 1. I decided on using four voices and mirror them around the middle C axis. 2. For each melody note, I added the mirrored bass below it (for example, a top note A is accompanied by the bass Eb, both a major sixth above/below middle C). 3. After that, I chose both internal notes (considering that those need to also be mirrored against each other). Except for two measures, the whole main theme was created through that technique. Afterwards I composed a tonal middle section and turned the piece into the form ABA'B'A''. This time I tried avoiding excessive exact repetition (with techniques such as changing octaves, creating different melodic contours and accompaniment, or mixing final restatement of main theme with the coda) in order to add some variety to the whole. That is because I tend to just copy and paste most of my sections and I want to get rid of that habit. In addition, the first measure copies the beginning of Schubert's Impromptu No.1 in C minor. As always, every feedback, comment or suggestion is more than welcome and hope you enjoy it! Thank you!

Hello everyone, I recently updated a little draft of music for string quintet on the incomplete works forum and I just developed it into a full piece. After some thought, the section felt somehow like a developed theme, so I composed a main theme by using some of the musical features found in that draft I composed. The piece is an elegy and has the following sections: [m.1~m.9] Introduction -- The introduction was composed by making use of the most important harmonies of the piece: Cmaj, Cminor, Dbmaj and Gmaj. [m.10 ~ m.25] Main theme -- Main theme in C minor. This theme is in 2/2 (cut time). It works as a period but, in this case, both statements end in a half cadence (the second has a stronger modulation to G). [m.26 ~ m.40] Development section (original draft) -- Developmental section which starts with the main theme in Cmaj. This section is repeated once and it is in 4/4 (common time). [m.41 ~ m.51] Restatement of main theme -- second part of the main theme repeated once, this time ending in a perfect cadence (with picardy third in last chord). I am considering repeating also the first part of the theme in the restatement. Somehow I feel the development lasts for long enough as to justify a complete repeat of the initial theme, but I am still not sur. Any suggestion about the best thing to do is welcome! I think the atmosphere fits that title of "elegy", but it is also too hopeful at times so I am not sure if it is really an elegy. Please, let me know if you have any suggestion for the title! Also, I am not sure about the use of dotted notes for those moments in which they need to cut the phrase a little earlier. Would there be a better way for notating that? Thank you! As always any feedback is more than welcome and hope you enjoy it!