ComposaBoi

As always seems to be the case with your music, I absolutely love it. And your compositional abilities as well as expression blow me away. 😁 That being said, I have two issues with composition itself. Although the 2nd refrain's "bell-like" texture is quite beautiful, it does obscure the melody a bit, especially bars 71-72. I feel just the top note of the octaves would achieve the same effect without obscuring the melody. I'm sorry for saying this, but I think the transition to the final return of the refrain is a tad too long. When I listened the first time, I was getting kind of impatient 😬 I have other issues, but they're just related to the engraving. For example, there are many points throughout the score where slurs collide with accidentals, articulations, other slurs, and sometime the notehead itself! Now of course, we're composers, not engravers. But if we make our own scores, it's my opinion that effort should be put in to make them beautiful and well-polished. Regardless, it's a very beautiful work. I look forward to the concluding movement(s)!

In my opinion it would make more sense to have 2 french horns and 1 trumpet instead of the other way round. Horns do a better job at creating a fuller and more balanced sound. Composers have always used them (tbf kindof lazily) to fill in harmony because they just work well for it. Also, they blend exceptionally well with the woodwinds, which is why they are above the trumpets on sheet music, despite not being the soprano part of the brass section, because they're "in between" the winds and brass. The trumpet on the other hand is very punchy and doesn't blend as well. This is why in the classical era, they're used largely for fanfare-like textures, and in the romantic era, they often take the foreground playing melodies.

OK FIRST OFF WHY IS THERE SUCH A HUGE BLANK SPACE AFTER YOUR COMMENT!?? It's taking me ages to scroll back and forth!! 😭 Thank you. Every time someone tells me that my music touches them or anything like that, it really means the whole world to me. Yup, I can see that too. I might just raise the melody higher, because it'd me more of a hassle to edit the accompaniment and I'm lazy. But if it doesn't work well, I'll have to fix the accompaniment TwT I'll figure something out God willing!! I just have to be careful not to get carried away with modulating, so the second theme doesn't become too long xD And I'm sure there are part writing issues all over the place. I rushed learning counterpoint when I did, so I'm thinking I missed something, especially since I still struggle writing good fugues 🥲 Thank you! And yes, my music is very personal. I only ever write music (except for study pieces or competition stuff) when I'm inspired by something that strikes me in my personal life. And since I'm a super emotional guy, that usually means the music is emotional. Some tell me that I'm actually too emotional for a guy, and they pile it with a bunch of other "effeminate" attributes of mine, so I'm going to embrace that and make my 6th piano sonata purposely feminine 😈

The development took a lot of work xD so I'm glad you like it! I'll try your suggestion out. I'm not sure which part you're calling the "Beethovanian hopeful theme" tbh. Do you mean b. 154 to the retransition? Anyway, I could probably incorporate some Theme 1 motifs in the accompaniment to add some drama 🤯 and excitement like you said. I think I agree. My first draft was even worse with the end, and I thought I fixed it, but as I've listened to it more and more, it's hit me that it still doesn't feel earned. Whereas something like my Seven Sorrows piece, the end feels much more deserved, even if it's musically much less mature than this piece, it still does better in that respect. What will be tricky is how I'm going to fix this issue. I could have like a collapse immediately after the recap maybe. Or I could just get rid of the 2nd theme as it currently is in the recap and have this final triumph take place of it. I think just having it come immediately after the same theme is what makes it feel unearned. Like it was already there, no reason for the triumph. I'll figure something out haha. When I do I'll just post the finished piece to my youtube so I'm not bothering this site with more of this same piece xD

hmm, maybe. I'll try it a little faster. But I'm hesitant to do Adagio because then every movement would have a part at adagio 😬 They're not deliberate, so thanks for pointing it out!! Also, I'm glad you liked this part! I showed the piece to my twin brother (who also composes and imo is much better than me), and he didn't like this part very much 😭

Whipped this up super fast 😄

The root note of the new home key is the note that the augmented chord was gravitating toward. Heard one after the other it makes more sense imo. Also, the keys of all the movements outlines a D augmented chord: D F# A#(Bb in this case for ease of reading and writing 😅) and D again. It’s all part of my massive big brain hyper-genius plan 🤯 (sarcasm) I am actually not a string player! But my brother is and I always have him test my music lol. You’ll notice I have very simple bowing in this movement for the exact purpose of giving the string players an easier time lol. (Sorry lower strings 😬) Hehehe, once again all part of my evil plan 😈 The light scherzo is meant to be “interrupted” by both the sighing motif and the english horn motif from the first movement. It’s nice to hear a second opinion, and interestingly, Tchaikovsky was a massive influence for this movement! Thanks alot for the feedback, I look forward to your “indefinite” future comments! 🤣

I think you said that last time, and I agree! It’s just difficult to compose with the fast chromatic runs 😭 the main thing is that the allegro part is my subordinate theme and I want the exposition to be successful in its EEC, so I need to not modulate TOO far xD but I agree. It gets a little repetitive 😅 Hmm. The problem might in part be due to the program because the dynamic there is forte and fortissimo, but I’ll start the crescendo earlier, maybe even make it start on fp to accentuate the cresc, and maybe I’ll make it molto accelerando instead of just accelerando 🤔 Hehehe that’s what I wanted 😈

I was trying to limit myself more with auxiliary winds with this piece lol, and I thought it worked fine, but I’ll try a piccolo, or maybe just use the very highest register of the flute. I’ll see what works. Yup! 👍 I’ll try that too, but I’ll probably end up preferring how it is now 🤣 I may have stolen that accompaniment from the 3rd movement of Mahler’s second symphony 😬 Thanks for the feedback! I always appreciate it.

Once I'm officially done with the piece, I'm going to put it in musescore 4 with the fancy musesounds. I just don't like composing in that newer program

I'm almost done with this piece, I just want to see all you nice people's thoughts before I call it complete. The program is in the last post I made about it: Thanks in advance for any helpful criticisms or advice 😄

I have no criticism, I just wanted to say well done! It's such a simple piece, polished to perfection, and I love it!

I talked with him. He said he uses a midi keyboard and didn’t play the parts he had trouble playing. So he’s sort of “half playing” I suppose

Sorry to break it to you, but listening to this, I'm getting many clues that you were scammed, because this does not sound real. Even if they had used an electric piano, there's no way their tuplets are that precise at that speed, there's like no dynamic nuance, and the dynamics rarely even match properly, and the pedaling sounds unnatural. Sounds like they took a midi and messed around with tempo changes. The piece itself is well written. The themes are memorable, they develop nice, etc., so well done. The main issue I have is the enharmonic spelling in the score makes it troublesome to read sometimes, so I'd suggest reading into that.

The Chopin sonata was definitely a big inspiration, but I didn't even realise the clear Liszt Dante sonata influence lol. I did intend an attacca at the end, I just forgot what it was called 😐. That was a typo. There was another typo where I accidentally did 'mosse' instead of 'mosso'. I also noticed I left my full name in there, so to avoid being doxxed, I updated the score with some of these fixes. Just another thing I missed. Fixed that too. Thank you for the feedback!