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I got all these emotions
I don't know what to do with
I thought it was all a myth
Never thought something like this
could happen to a girl like me
Now you got me down on my knees
Baby we was like Bonnie and Clyde
Now you got me thinking bout suicide
I got all these emotions
I don't know what to do with
I can't decide what's wrong
what's right
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These lyrics are once again quite good. I would consider changing "Baby we was like Bonnie and Clyde" to "Babe, we were like Bonnie and Clyde" as it may help smoothen the flow of the lyrics. I would also consider getting rid of down from down on my knees, as on my knees pretty much means the same thing and is a lot smoother than down on my knees.
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Yo, dig the sound. Even though break ups suck, you got some music out of it. It gave you the inspiration and passion to create something that means something to you. Would you have been able to write something like this without some tragedy in your life? Sometimes these things bring out the best in us.
Next time you write a song, post it in the forums! You'll get much more attention, and probably more feedback because people here will notice it more. If you're writing rap music, I'd go to the rock/pop/band music sub forum; it helps to post in the right place since a lot of people routinely check certain genres that they're familiar with.
Is the beat yours? Banger music from what I hear
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Yea this break up did suck but i'm glad it happened because the person I was when I was with him was not the person I wanted to be. It also helped me get a great song out of it. The beat was something i was just playing with. If this breakup never happened I would never be able to write and do music like I always wanted to. Thank you tho
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Bro I tried so loving hard to make you happy
I don’t know what i’ma do anymore
Cry at night so no one sees the pain
Eyes bloodshot red feeling high is the new game
Baby you was my wall of fame
I should’ve listened when they said you not who you claim
You said i’m the one to blame
Baby you a wonder of shame
Bro I tried so loving hard to make you happy
I don’t know what i’ma do anymore
Cry at night so no one sees the pain
Eyes bloodshot red feeling high is the new game
Baby you was my wall of fame
I should’ve listened when they said you not who you claim
You said i’m the one to blame
Baby you a wonder of shame
Why you let me walk right into the flame
So baby tell me what’s her name
This scraggy is so lame
Was i just a game
This scraggy all the same
You need to be tame
This scraggy ain’t like some video game
You hit the aim
But you said i’m the one to blame
scallop I hope you burn up in a flame
Look what we became
It’s a shame
Bro I tried so loving hard to make you happy
I don’t know what i’ma do anymore
Cry at night so no one sees the pain
Eyes bloodshot red feeling high is the new game
Baby you was my wall of fame
I should’ve listened when they said you not who you claim
You said i’m the one to blame
Baby you a wonder of shame
Why you let me walk right into the flame
So baby tell me what’s her name
This scraggy is so lame
Was i just a game
This scraggy all the same
You need to be tame
This scraggy ain’t like some video game
You hit the aim
But you said i’m the one to blame
scallop I hope you burn up in a flame
Look what we became
It’s a shame
But don’t worry i overcame
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Don't trust a soul because the more you trust them the more you get hurt. You put people to a point where you think you can trust them but then they walk away like you are nothing at all. You have your walls for a reason why put them down for someone who ain't going to stay longer than a month. When they give you all these promises just know they are lying. They tell you what you want so you will leave them alone about it.
