You've created an image. Now why not try an emotional journey?
I've listened to this mp3 twice, and I'm very sorry to say this, but I don't think writing like this takes very much realization and consideration. I could see this as a choreographed ballet work, where one could appreciate the dancing, but not in a concert hall.
It relies on randomness and disorder: something attainable in any amateur. It isn't enough for me to just simply have a texture divided by the occasional percussion instrument. I require blatant motifs, craftsmanship, beautiful melodies, at least some pleasant harmony, shape, and above all, stimuli. For me, so much modernist music (and modern art) has inspired but one uniform feeling: insolent bleakness. A few good examples of this emotional medium are valuable, but I believe the single feeling has been explored and exhausted ad nauseum. It's time to move past it, or at the very least, offer contrast along with it.
Some people may look at a Jackson Pollock painting and say they feel something. Anyone might admit that it's decorative and dramatic. Others may look deeper at it and feel offended at its arrogance: like the artist wanted to rub in the viewers' faces that he is smarter, and knows something they don't--and he will not stoop so low as to contour to their more commonplace sentiments or emotions, but while achieving this with minimal skill or effort so as to achieve the maximum level of offence.
Further still, some might see it as a sort of deficiency merely disguised as esotericism.