I just finished a pop song with a piano part and I'm gonna sumbit the lyrics for u guys to critique. I wrote the melody first and thought it sounded kinda sad and a bit angry so i thought aha! sad love song! lol
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Piano Intro
Verse 1
When my heart was torn
Burning with regret and shame
Couldn't help but mourn
I'd been conned into the same old game
These tears won't dry away
My whole world crashed today
I have one thing to say
I will be ok
Chorus
My memories are distant spirits
Calamity, a story untold
No one will know of my troubles
This hushed event will cease to unfold
And knows the time I think to myself
Why do i care so much anyway?
I find that there is no reason
So now's the time to Stop.
You're Erased
Short piano solo
Verse 2
Ooo a new day
And i start to contemplate
Figment of my mind
Notice? Left my heart behind.
What tears? There's none today
My whole world is ok
There's one thing left to say
I have found my way
Chorus repeated
Bridge
Life
Beautiful
Life
Calm and still
Instrumental
Modulated Chorus
Ooo Gone
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Piano outro
There we go , all i have to do now is figure out how to get a recording onto here. I'm never good at those technological kind of things...
:)