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people are telling me writing punk love songs or anything to do with punk, are getting out of style...but i think other wise...

i dont get what you mean by the rounds....but other than that you mean to say i should add music? oh, and the am and all on the bottom, are you suggesting those chords?

can you guys tell me what you think about this, what should i change? and what comes to your mind when you read it, and whether you think it's good, and whether i shounld give it a rock sound or punk, or both...here it is: Lyrics "Sunset Downfall" Like a helpless bird flapping away in the air but going no where With a broken wing i'm flying, but at the same time dying a part of me won't wake the other half's drowning Cuz if you cut my skin i'll bleed and if you smither me with smoke i'll choke Put me in the dark i won't see And stab me in the heart i swear i'll die <2x> Just like a fragile egg any second i'll wake or may end up dead You're helpless in foolish protection anything can happen from here a part of me won't wake the other half's burning I'm twitching endlessly burning, and drowning over again The sunset's above me but also under me The shadows cover my wall and everything above it all The sun isn't shining day after day it's night I'm twitching endlessly choking, and gasping over again I'll bleed i'll choke i'll end blind and i swear i'll die Just like the sunset's downfall....

i think it was like one to two years ago, i was trying to write a bookreport and then i thought of the stupid english teacher, and so i just wrote down all the stuff i hated about her. i showed it to my friends and they later told me it might actually do for a punk song, so since then i've been writing songs for punk, rock, and pop rock.

can you guys tell me what you think about this, what should i change? and what comes to your mind when you read it: Lyrics "Sunset Downfall" Like a helpless bird flapping away in the air but going no where With a broken wing i'm flying, but at the same time dying a part of me won't wake the other half's drowning Cuz if you cut my skin i'll bleed and if you smither me with smoke i'll choke Put me in the dark i won't see And stab me in the heart i swear i'll die <2x> Just like a fragile egg any second i'll wake or may end up dead You're helpless in foolish protection anything can happen from here a part of me won't wake the other half's burning I'm twitching endlessly burning, and drowning over again The sunset's above me but also under me The shadows cover my wall and everything above it all The sun isn't shining day after day it's night I'm twitching endlessly choking, and gasping over again I'll bleed i'll choke i'll end blind and i swear i'll die Just like the sunset's downfall....

can you guys tell me what you think about this, what should i change? and what comes to your mind when you read it: Lyrics "Sunset Downfall" Like a helpless bird flapping away in the air but going no where With a broken wing i'm flying, but at the same time dying a part of me won't wake the other half's drowning Cuz if you cut my skin i'll bleed and if you smither me with smoke i'll choke Put me in the dark i won't see And stab me in the heart i swear i'll die <2x> Just like a fragile egg any second i'll wake or may end up dead You're helpless in foolish protection anything can happen from here a part of me won't wake the other half's burning I'm twitching endlessly burning, and drowning over again The sunset's above me but also under me The shadows cover my wall and everything above it all The sun isn't shining day after day it's night I'm twitching endlessly choking, and gasping over again I'll bleed i'll choke i'll end blind and i swear i'll die Just like the sunset's downfall....