Siersan

>DYNAMICS and PHRASING Um, what? Sorry, I'm new to the composing thing, so I'm not entirely sure what you're trying to say. Do I need to add dynamics and clarify the phrasing? >it's not all that ideomatically written Can you elaborate? What would be idiomatic and what in particular makes this one not so? I'm confident that it's not idiomatically written as I was just making a good sound rather than following any rules or styles (because I don't know any). ;) >theres nothing really unique to the instruments being done Meaning, it doesn't cater to the strengths and weaknesses of the instrument? >it also looks as if it were written by a pianist I wish I were a pianist, then I'd probably have an easier time with theory. The only instrument I play is the flute. >only that it is very diatonic, short and therefore predictable I seem to be all questions today. Can you specify what you mean by "very diatonic"? I would expect that with nothing but the key of C major, but I'm not entirely sure how that makes it predictable. Thanks for the comments, by the way.

All comments welcome. :) untitled.mid untitled.pdf

That bad, huh? ;)

It's hard because you can't hide a weak melody with clever harmony. Do you want something complicated and fast so that listeners won't miss any harmony you might have put in, or would you rather keep their interest with participation (where they hum along with a simple and infectious tune)?

I came up with this with sort of a heaven vs. hell type face-off in mind (Flute and Cello). Suggestions? Criticism? "Quit composing Siersan and get a real job"? :P Thanks! untitled.pdf untitled.mid

I'm not really qualified to comment as more than a listener, but I think the flute part is too repetitive. I like the accompaniment though (especially measures 33 to 41).

Wow, thanks for the kind words. I did consider slurs at first, but as I settled on the imagery of rain drops for each note they seemed to detract from the feel of the piece. Then again, all I'm going on is the MIDI playback since I'm not quite up to playing it myself yet, and with that there's no difference in how slur/no slur sounds. I'll definitely try to see how different articulation affects the result.

For the record, I know virtually nothing about composition and only recently started learning to read music and play the flute. So criticism and advice are most welcome. My teacher likes duets and has started encouraging me to write to solidify what he's teaching me about theory. I came up with this as my third composition and would like to know what I did wrong. ;) Attached are the sheet music in PDF format and a MIDI from my notation software that I'm sure will sound much better when I'm able to play it on a real instrument. Thanks for your time! spring shower.pdf spring shower.mid