I like these ideas a lot--reminds me a little of New Order.
Production quality could be better though--as SYS65 said there is a lack of low frequencies. To my ears, this would be much better with some solid bass and kick. Also, you should bus everything to a reverb (on individual sends)--that would really pull things together, even if the reverb is almost undetectable it will make your mix gel.
Erick