Bretterfly

I started writing this a few years back on the guitar, and it's never really been finished (like most of my compositions). I like it enough to make an attempt to work on it some more. ----- I've noticed that I have a habit of leaving out important information in my posts regarding... things, and I'll try to do a better job of... that. This piece is not finished, and may be nowhere near finished. Any opinions or suggestions are welcome. Thank you. =) -----UPDATE----- I've played around with this some more and added a few ideas I had, as well as cut out some various things. So far this piece has gone in a completely different direction than I thought it would. Measures 25 and 27 would have some hammer-ons and pull-offs to make it sound smoother. If I ever get my equipment set up so I can make decent recordings, I'll record instead of using sound fonts. I'm still concerned about how well it fits together, primarily with the transitions at measure 16, and 44. Is it too much contrast? ---10-19-09--- Score -> oak2.pdf - File Shared from Box.net - Free Online File Storage MP3 -> oak2.mp3 - File Shared from Box.net - Free Online File Storage

I did some stuff... hopefully it's not too atrocious.

Thanks for the comments. I should have put more time into scoring this, I'll admit. Now that it's been mentioned, it does indeed sound like 3,3,2. Anyhoo, I'll just stick to midi when providing audios, until get said instrument(s). I'll work on some accompaniment and see if I can't further develop the piece as well. Again, thanks. =)

I like the inversion of the motif. The dynamics are well used, but almost too contrasting in measures nine and forty-four. The mp at measure thirty-six and seventy-nine seemed right to me, even with the pp following 79. For 9 and 44, perhaps decrescendo from a measure before for the violins, or mp; p just seemed too soft after ff for the violins. The pizzicato came through about perfect at that part, though, and I think pizz. goes quite well with the piece. Anyways, the presentation and development seems logical and to-the-point, at least to me; I like that. The use of rhythm and dynamics provides great contrast, especially when used together; it really adds to the building and releasing of urgency and suspense. After measure 44, you do a good job of releasing the constant tension, but I feel you could change it up by using the violins more "gently", and emphasizing on harmony and possibly do something more interesting with the cello pizz. Just and idea. =p You seem to have put a good deal of effort and thought into it. Good job. =)

These pieces both sound great. I like the way Priol develops and introduces new ideas. At about 43 seconds it reminded me some of Michael Hedges. It's very lively and fluttery. The jazzy, gritty, salsa sound of Black Elegance, if that's anything close to describing it, has an interesting use of color with the different rhythms, and it makes for great texture. I like the way that things get flipped around after it's about halfway through. I'd love to be able to play something like this. =p

I agree with what Charlie said about dynamics. It sounds nice, but I felt that the melody was lost after a while, and became "drowned". It seems to grow weaker because it continues to change throughout the piece. I liked how it progressed, and I think it could benefit if you did something such as divide it into sections (Like "Part A" "Part B", and so on) for each major change or development, and then better establish it , similar to how your piece started. That initial clarity seems to get muddied as it developed. If you're happy with how it is, then I think your only concern would be dynamics. Some of them seem unnecessary, like the consecutive pp's in 19, and dynamics in measure 43-44 and 61-63 seems pointless.

I love this. I feel it has a lot of emotion, and that it tells a story. Some of it sounds like fear, some like anguish, distress, and that feeling when your hair goes all prickly.

I like how you introduce your theme. Overlapping the sections to build a chord gives it a full sound, and it makes the motif quite clear. The use of the different sections, playing each one a little, helps keep it interesting, as well as your use of triplets. Usually I love a piece with lots of contrast in sound, but for its purpose, I think it has the right amount. If it were actually intended for a video game, I'd say there was too contrast much when you "slow it down" on page eleven (measure 65ish). Anyways, it sounds great. It reminds me of the Star Wars flight simulator games for the PC. Well done.

I'd suggest picking the tracks that best reflect your CD, or the ones that best shows the diversity of it, and indicating those as the ones to listen to for people who don't have the time to listen to all of them. I briefly listened to each one, and they sound great for a rave, dance party, or something. It's not really my taste, but it was fun to listen to. I really like how the sixth one changes from lounge music to funk. They all sound like they were put together well. For a first CD, the overall sound is diverse enough to appeal to a lot of people, I think. I'd like to see the cover when you get around to it!

The crickets and birds sound fine to me, but the voice seems out of context, and it seems weird for water to just start trickling. The voice sounds like an old audio clip. If there's hiss or static, you could try to match it and gradually fade in so when the audio clip starts it's not so odd. Or, perhaps have a click like a radio knob on, or the prompt static sound televisions make when powering up.

Very nice. It sounds quite Baroque. I think the parts for the violin and piano compliment each other well.

It reminds me of something from Star Wars. I like it.

This is a simple piece I wrote intended for the cello. I considered calling it a "prelude", but, a prelude to what? =p It's one of the few things I've written for the sake of writing. ---EDIT--- I reworked the score, and I hope some one other than me can understand it. I also attempted to put together a trio. I decided to call it "The Sleepy Companion" based on a piano accompaniment I started on. The Sleepy Companion: Solo Cello Score > SleepyCompanionCello.pdf - File Shared from Box.net - Free Online File Storage Solo Cello Audio > SleepyCompanionCello.mp3 - File Shared from Box.net - Free Online File Storage Trio Score > SleepyCompanionTrio.pdf - File Shared from Box.net - Free Online File Storage Trio Audio > SleepyCompanionTrio.mp3 - File Shared from Box.net - Free Online File Storage

Ah, yeah, high quality enables stereo. The panning makes a tremendous difference! Nicely done. =p I almost always wear headphones.

Very nice. I love the idea for a scene you have. =p