I wrote this before I discovered noteflight.com, so I had one of my friends put the score into finale for me, so I wasn't in complete control of how it all looked, though I apologize for the issues.
Manam, could you please elaborate on what you didn't like about pgs. 16-17, because your sentences didn't make that much sense I personally like that section the most out of the entire piece.
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