hale Posted January 25, 2006 Posted January 25, 2006 can you guys tell me what you think about this, what should i change? and what comes to your mind when you read it, and whether you think it's good, and whether i shounld give it a rock sound or punk, or both...here it is: Lyrics "Sunset Downfall" Like a helpless bird flapping away in the air but going no where With a broken wing i'm flying, but at the same time dying a part of me won't wake the other half's drowning Cuz if you cut my skin i'll bleed and if you smither me with smoke i'll choke Put me in the dark i won't see And stab me in the heart i swear i'll die <2x> Just like a fragile egg any second i'll wake or may end up dead You're helpless in foolish protection anything can happen from here a part of me won't wake the other half's burning I'm twitching endlessly burning, and drowning over again The sunset's above me but also under me The shadows cover my wall and everything above it all The sun isn't shining day after day it's night I'm twitching endlessly choking, and gasping over again I'll bleed i'll choke i'll end blind and i swear i'll die Just like the sunset's downfall....
Recommended Posts