O Magnum Mysterium

Hello again

This is my second stab at choral music. I was inspired to write my own version of a 'Magnum Mysterium' after listening to several versions from different periods (Poulenc, Victoria, Gjeilo, Lauridsen etc). Please excuse the metronome in the background, I forgot to remove that upon uploading x_x. And it should also be noted that certain tempo elements aren't how I would've noted them, but I put them there just for the sake of getting the playback to be as close as possible to what I wanted it to sound like. I hope you enjoy, and please feel free to criticize!!

It doesn't work, the video...

Sorry about that. Fixed!!

HI

Nice and interesting. I should fix some parts. The organ is too loud with the voices. And the rallentando before the gaudioso is too long. the sound of the organ is beautiful.

Thank you very much. Yes, I was a bit sceptical about the rallentando and the organ's volume. I will proceed to revise them. I hope the piece is okay harmonically speaking? My former teacher spoke about my excessive use of thirds in harmony.

Thanks again ^_^ 

This is a little too unfocused for me. Voice leading doesn't always match the dynamic and visa versa in numerous locations. It sounds okay in terms of the notes but i personally didn't hear much in terms of clear direction.

I disagree with Luis on the sound of the organ. The actual sound sounds muffled and a lot of the added tones in the soprano don't compliment the bass, especially with passing tones.

The 5/4 section lacked character for me, and also was a contribution to the lack of focus. Everything was doing its own thing, but it wasn't counterpoint.

Maybe I'm just being picky, but I'm not hit with the same kind of character I get from the famous D major O Magnum.

Hi there, thanks for the comment!

It is very helpful that you pointed out all of these discrepancies! I shall try to correct them. What do you suggest I do to create a more focused sound?