commemoration_of_childhood Commemoration of Childhood

Hello

The childhood period was short. I am remember joys, pains and suffering in the latest the childhood period. I wish it composition be lovely for you and share it to your best friends.

This is not solo keyboard music. 
Sorry, it just sounds generic. Nothing pushed the envelope here. Also ending on the ii chord of D was an odd choice... felt like you didn't know how to end the piece. When you were trying to return to the ii chord from V or even vi, it felt awkward in the third part of the progression. The voice leading was a bit off, especially when you have suspensions... 9-8 and 4-3 are standard but you ended up using odd ones to justify the chord progression. I can't argue that it sounds nice as easy listening music, but I feel like that's not what art should be about. Cheers.

Why it's generic? Thank you... I know that using violin in 2 latest measures could not acceptable choice...  i try... i can

I'm really enjoying your piece :)

While I would agree with Monarcheon that it may not be a true "solo piano" piece, I'm not sure that's what you were going for. That's how it seems as I listen anyhow. It's introspective, and the subtle pushing and pulling communicates to me the emotion you were going for. I actually liked your violin throughout the whole work, including the last few bars. The same goes for your ending notes--true, it's not the tonic like we would expect, but with the right set up in advance you could end like that quite nicely. I think what made them feel unexpected or incomplete is that you didn't "lead" the audience to be ready for that finish. Unfortunately I'm not sure how I'd make that happen, but the challenge of making something unusual work is exciting!

Your construction is good, your techniques are good, don't be afraid now to look deep into the music as you're writing to find the "hidden gems". Then your work becomes showing that stuff off. It could be as simple as a single chord substitution to set off a melodic phrase, or something radically new that nobody's dreamed of yet. Go big, and enjoy it! Composition is a big world, have fun in it :)

Keep composing!

Gustav Johnson

Thank you my friend.

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First I would like to say that we all enjoy music on a good level but we are honest about the music people do. It isn't done to insult you, but in a way so that you will know what should and should not be done to make your music even better. 

There is nothing wrong with your music but it could stand to have a bit *more* you know and as a musician there is always that hidden potential in your heart and soul that your ability as it stands now has not reached yet but *can* be unlocked as you learn more and more.

I enjoyed this but Monarcheon knows her stuff man, I can vouch for that...and she was right but all you have to do man is reach down deeper than this and create something even more memorable.

Good work man.

Thank you. My composition is simple, and is necessary to any composer that express his feelings in the best form of possible.