Narcissim

Hello;;;

i'd appreciate feedback on this track.

mixing in process as still learning // creative inputs are very much appreciated.

blisses,,,

bleum

edit: changes made; added bass like b major and minor chord elements.

I like this. Not one of my preferred genres I admit but this is good I think.

I always compare stuff to other forms of entertainment or literature to best describe my thoughts on something and this sounds like something out of a vampire movie.

For my critique:

I was actually waiting for more high points where it explodes into a world of ear catching bliss but perhaps I've been spoiled by orchestral music. For some reason I can't play the track past 1:00 so if there is a high point as I described I apologize, my connection is weak at the moment.

Thank you for listening LostSamurai.

I apologise as I'm not very good at uploading content.

I just uploaded a soundcloud link which should work better.

bleum.

No the upload is fine it's just my connection gets weak whenever its raining here.

Interesting work. I hear a really great opportunity to mix different tonalities in the piece. B major and B minor over an undefined bass would be cool.

After the first bit, the rest was perhaps a bit too repetitive for me; I know there are bits of change, but it doesn't contribute to the overall tone of the piece. 

I agree with Lost in his assertion that the highs should have been higher and the lows lower. Dynamic contrasts are important.

I appreciate your feedback, thank you for listening.

Monarcheon, I would really like to try out yours and LostSamurai's suggestions.

- Do you mean perhaps creating a B Minor and B Major bassline for the piece?

- Major highs and lows: I can see an opportunity for a low somewhere in the middle where i could place a 1 bar break and highs perhaps making the ending a bit more chaotic. 

Is this roughly what you mean?

bleum//

30 minutes ago, Bleum said:

Do you mean perhaps creating a B Minor and B Major bassline for the piece?

Not necessarily. More like switching between two to in the melody (homophony).

31 minutes ago, Bleum said:

I can see an opportunity for a low somewhere in the middle where i could place a 1 bar break and highs perhaps making the ending a bit more chaotic. 

Maybe. I more meant that the dynamic contrast throughout the entire piece/song is a bit lacking.