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Hello - I'm back, with four very short piano pieces for your enjoyment and valued criticism!
It's been a very sad year, but emotion is at the core of creativity !
The first piece is dedicated to my grandparents both of whom we lost this Autumn.

Currently in the works is a piece for woodwind and timpani, which is intended to depict a battle, but we'll see how that goes...

Dan

 

 

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1. Lovely. A lot of your V7 chords lack a third. The resolution after the chord at m. 14 is strange to me. m. 16's roll is also strange since it goes past the written note in the bass. Also in that measure, you have E-flat3 notated twice. 
2. Great! m. 24 and 42's engraving is strange... you might want to use multiple layers for it.
3. m. 50's C4 doesn't resolve correctly as an inner voice. m. 58, again with the engraving, same solution. I love the chromaticism starting m. 51, though; the whole thing's really nice.
4. The modulation at m. 82 was really well done. m. 96 why not use cross staff voicing? This is my favorite; a lot of twists and turns.

Lovely work!

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Really nice short pieces, they remind me B's Bagatelles somehow.

The only little issues I have are purely graphical: apart a couple of spelling on which I don't agree (but I probably be wrong!) some moments could come out better on paper with a two-voice writing, as suggested by Monarcheon. And, if I were you, I should added a couple of clef changes to make things more readable.

But what matters is the music, and here it's really nice and well written for the instrument. Could you send me the .sib? I'd like to try them at the piano

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