3 Violin Short Song

I know 23-25 are a little off but I kinda got stuck into liking it. Also the submit is out of place, it is meant for the fortissimo 

m. 3 - crossed voices are a bit awkward.
m. 17 lacks a bit of the tension you want because there's no actual suspension there, even though I think that's what you were after.
m. 20's passage uses a lot of fourths and fifths... how you use that info is up to you.
m. 29 needs to be notated better... ties would help.
I think you should also take bowings into account? There's just a lot of things that don't match up correctly.
Throughout this thing you have a lot of second dissonances that you resolve interestingly, most often through hockets. This isn't bad and presents a unique way of doing but make sure it's what you want and it isn't done by accident.

Cheers!