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Hello all :),

It's my little piano composition. I' m  self- taught musician so please, be understanding. :)

It's a nice little exercise in functional harmony. A couple notes:

The awkward jumps between parts of the phrases were just that... awkward. It was very weirdly times. Perhaps better in a concert live setting?
Your avoiding of the V/vi chord (E major in this case) is kind of frustrating. I'm not entirely sure why you would forgo it considering everything else is decently traditional, and could make for a great moment if you knew it existed and were saving it.
The section around 1:30 with the 5th-spanned runs against the melody felt a bit forced and not as fluid as the rest of the piece, since it ignores the non-chord tones for the benefit of continuity, but I don't think it works here, particularly. 

Cheers---

Hi Annabel

I was quite moved by this.

This must be a recording, rather than a computer-playback

Some people can touch us with their voice. I didn´t know it was possible to touch people with their way of playing until now.

Beautiful.
 

I also think it's nice. As Komoworld said, it's touching.

I think it's more than a 'little piano piece'..  It is quite heartfelt, and has ' a soul' in it's performance..  Love your use of tempo changes..  Ending on one note,  very smart.. 

Excellent.. we want to hear more.. very inspired..  

Thank you for answears!

Monarcheon- I'll consider your  advice. As a newbie and self- taught I need such comments. Thank you!

Kimoworld, Luis Hernandez- Thank you! Kimoworld- yes, it' s a recording.

markstyles- Thank you for your precious comment too.:) I, m glad you like it, especially tempo changes- I haven't been convinced at all. :)

Moving, indeed; moving.

I think the reason why this moves people (and me) is because the music sounds innocent, infantile, fragile.
On the other hand the music tends to sound melancholic or even tragic. The simplicity of chords in combination with the lightness of the melody can achieve these atmospheres and thereby move people. The lovely performance strengthens this.
You can be proud of this wonderful piece.

I would love to hear more! Well done!

Maarten
 

Maarten- Thank you for nice words. I'll upload something new soon.

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innocent, infantile, fragile.

Because maybe I  know almost nothing about music theory or even notation... But I' m going to change that. That's why I am here. :)

1 hour ago, Annabel said:

Maarten- Thank you for nice words. I'll upload something new soon.

Because maybe I  know almost nothing about music theory or even notation... But I' m going to change that. That's why I am here. :)

I am looking forward to it!
The reason you mention does not seem correct to me. These three adjectives may be descripted as parts of your personal style. However, we cannot conclude this yet, because we haven't heard any other pieces yet. Indeed the simplicity can be caused by your lack of knowledge, but it may also be part of your 'voice'. I could be completely wrong, but music is not science, it is art; and that is the reason why I love music.

Just now, Maarten Bauer said:

I am looking forward to it!
The reason you mention does not seem correct to me. These three adjectives may be descripted as parts of your personal style. However, we cannot conclude this yet, because we haven't heard any other pieces yet. Indeed the simplicity can be caused by your lack of knowledge, but it may also be part of your 'voice'. I could be completely wrong, but music is not science, it is art; and that is the reason why I love music.

 

I don' t know if that reason I mentioned is correct for me too, I'ts hard to say. :)

You may have right- I love fragile, delicate style in art and want to pass something like that, so it could be my style as well.:) But I don't know how it would look if my technique was better.

PS  I think science is a kind of art :)

1 minute ago, Annabel said:

PS  I think science is a kind of art :)

Could you please tell me in what way you think science is a kind of art?

Just now, Maarten Bauer said:

Could you please tell me in what way you think science is a kind of art?

 

I think that science bases not only on facts we can capture with our senses, but on intuition too. I would say, even more part of science bases on intuition- same as art.  And I consider inventions not only as something functional but as a pieces of art too. Excluding that some of them are seems beautifull to me ( i. e. Tesla plasma ball), their "existence" has the same source like pieces of art: desire to know and to create.   

1 minute ago, Annabel said:

I think that science bases not only on facts we can capture with our senses, but on intuition too. I would say, even more part of science bases on intuition- same as art.  And I consider inventions not only as something functional but as a pieces of art too. Excluding that some of them are seems beautifull to me ( i. e. Tesla plasma ball), their "existence" has the same source like pieces of art: desire to know and to create.   

 

That is a very interesting view. I like the way you look at inventions, namely as pieces of art. For me, the beauty of composing music is that nothing is correct or incorrect. I don't have the same feelings for for instance Mathematics where in most of the cases something is either correct or incorrect. What do you think?

19 hours ago, Maarten Bauer said:

That is a very interesting view. I like the way you look at inventions, namely as pieces of art. For me, the beauty of composing music is that nothing is correct or incorrect. I don't have the same feelings for for instance Mathematics where in most of the cases something is either correct or incorrect. What do you think?

 

What I think... Music and maths have some rules both, like every language, and  due to this we have  that corectness- incorectness matter.  I agree with you that with the aid of music we can show our feelings and  with the aid of maths we can't. 

14 hours ago, ilv said:

This is a lovely and touching piece of music. I think it could be a little more fluid i.e the gaps should be adjusted. Sometimes they're too short and sometimes too long, and there's sometimes too many of them.

 

Than you!

I like spaces in music, but I  know I need to learn how to have control over them. During next recording  I'll take it into account.

Also,  I would like to ask, what kind of excercises are the best for  better ' fluidness'?

for a self-taught musician, I think it was awesome. I could hear some strings or a violoncello as well in my head, playing along with the piano.

 thanx for sharing!