orchestration Leaving New York (DRAFT)

Another little something for critique (please rip it to shreds!)

I'm not particularly happy with this at the moment. Feels like it's all over the place. I think my main issue is probably the strings — they just don't feel like they're working. It's probably a combination of the writing and the orchestration (and maybe the samples I'm using as well), but maybe some more seasoned composers can give me some tips here (especially at mark D...)

As an aside, the director loves it, and is going to use it, but just for my own purposes I want to see if there's anything I can do with this to polish it up a bit. Score is attached, if that's helpful.

Anyway, here it is in context (ungraded first cut):

I don't think it's all over the place. When I watched the video, I really thought the music would fit.

I like it. I think the music supports well the scene. I would like to see more......!