Piano nocturne in d minor

Hello!

This is a finished piano piece in d minor...I just wanted some feedback and suggestions...Eventually if you can imagine new sections and developments that would be great to listen to! 

Thanks!

2 minutes ago, ilv said:

Could you please post a link? I can't find the music.

 

He did. What browser are you using? Did you block cookies, etc.?

@ilv would you like me to put a mp3 file?

@ilv I just attached the score...Would you explain me better your first point?

I also didn't get properly the last one ( measure 72)...Are you meaning that as first note of the measure I should better use a insted of g?

Thanks for your reply...really helpful!

Overall I like it.

There can definitely be found some sadness.
At some places, I really heard Chopin. His influence on this piece is very clear.
The mood is nice and the melodies are good.

For me the piece did not sound finished at 2.18. In fact, I expected a return of the A theme and this happened, which is very satisfying.
Maybe an expression indication in the tempo like Andantino cantabile would help the performers with the interpretation.

@Maarten Bauer Thanks a lot. Yes, Chopin influence is really clear in the piece..and also the mood he brought with him. Thanks for the tip about the tempo... I have already written it!

Sorry, I wasn't clear...I was meaning this 

"1:13 and 2:57: it is not a good idea to have the prominent presence of the leading tone in the soprano/melody and bass lines."

A nice approach to creating a music with a mood! I would suggest working on motivic development and variety for building the theme.Give a rhythmic introduction before exposing the melody.If the form is strophic - repeat it in a different register or tonality.If it is binar - add a more contrasting second theme.Thanks!

@MusicianXX12 thanks for yur feedback! I repeated the slow theme an octave higher in the second part of the piece just to give it some emphasis...what technique would you use as rhytmic introduction before the theme? I started showing the bass configuration...and I can only think something like that. I am curious :)

@ilv thanks! Now it's clear...I'll keep that in mind :)

2 hours ago, ferdi9749 said:

@MusicianXX12 thanks for yur feedback! I repeated the slow theme an octave higher in the second part of the piece just to give it some emphasis...what technique would you use as rhytmic introduction before the theme? I started showing the bass configuration...and I can only think something like that. I am curious :)

 

@ilv thanks! Now it's clear...I'll keep that in mind :)

 

 

I totally agree with you on the “bass configuration” before exposing the first theme, though I would make it a bit longer. The theme starting in m51 isn’t terribly contrasting – the same mood, the same tonality, almost the same tempo, and, first of all, the same, or almost the same, arpeggiated figures in the left hand. Even without creating a new rhythmic intro to the second theme, just by changing the pattern of the left hand accompaniment, the theme would get a much better stand out, IMHO. Thanks for allowing to discuss your music. The texture, harmony and voice leading is a separate topic. Again, I like your music for expressing a certain mood.

@MusicianXX12 You are defintely right...using a different movement in left hand would have given a new "light" to the new section...I'll use this technique in my future compositions...thanks for your useful advices!