piano "The Magic White And Pink Rose"

Hi to everyone! I'm back with a new piano & strings composition! The title is "the magic white and pink rose". I accept productive comments on my composition. I hope you like it. 

Use of 5/4 is interesting, I like that.
0:34, D major triad with minor third in the melody sounds awkward, but not actually that bad (can't tell if it's a mistake), but I don't know if that's what you intended, since ambient music normally subscribes to more functional harmony.
The inversions once the low tone enters the picture are a little weird. This could probably be fixed by making its presence a little less obvious. Like a second inversion chord on a VI chord is kind of awkward.
High piano notes around 1:45 are a little too loud.
Last chord suffers from the same thing in my second point. Just checking to make sure it's what you want.

On 15/9/2017 at 5:18 AM, Monarcheon said:

Use of 5/4 is interesting, I like that.
0:34, D major triad with minor third in the melody sounds awkward, but not actually that bad (can't tell if it's a mistake), but I don't know if that's what you intended, since ambient music normally subscribes to more functional harmony.
The inversions once the low tone enters the picture are a little weird. This could probably be fixed by making its presence a little less obvious. Like a second inversion chord on a VI chord is kind of awkward.
High piano notes around 1:45 are a little too loud.
Last chord suffers from the same thing in my second point. Just checking to make sure it's what you want.

 

5/4 isn't the time signature but 4/4. I've chosen the inversions of some piano chords because I liked the sound. I hope you glad to be listen it whereas if you don't like it I will improve then.

Thanks for your constructive comments! :)

I find it beautiful and inspiring.

Lovely piece and picture.
Both melody and accompaniment are very simple, yet powerful.

Ben fatto!