Piece for friends video of her grandparents

Hi all, my first upload on here. So, my friend came to me one day, having known that I liked to write and asked me to put something to some old footage she had of her grandparents. It took me a while to be happy with the outcome but eventually I got there.

My background is classical from a young age although the last few years my knowledge seems to be failing me, as I don’t concentrate too much on what is right and what is wrong when it comes to the theory of writing. I play around until I hit on something I like. Let me know what you think 😬

I really like the mood of this piece. There are some awkward moments, but these are minor and nobody's perfect.

Thank you for the feedback. What parts would you say are awkward? 

I think  it's perfect for the vídeo.

Amazing, the orchestration is fantastic. Really gentle and it takes you right where you wanna go. The dynamics and the overall levels of the frequencies are great.

Couple of small things:

* A couple of times there are some crackling elements of the crackling/static that we're slightly disturbing/loud. Example at: 1:10

* 0:56 - From here there was a slight harmonic disturbance between the string and the piano. However, listening to it again I'm not quite sure, might've been a fluke.

* 2:03 From here, I'm not quite sure about the layering of the strings and the piano at that moment

Other than these small details, it's great!

Edit: Those two remarks about the dissonances, it might not have to do with the actual correctness of it. It might be a small stacking of detune/reverb, dunno. It's so minimal. The first remark I couldn't even catch anymore the second time so.

6 minutes ago, benyamind said:

Amazing, the orchestration is fantastic. Really gentle and it takes you right where you wanna go. The dynamics and the overall levels of the frequencies are great.

Couple of small things:

* A couple of times there are some crackling elements of the crackling/static that we're slightly disturbing/loud. Example at: 1:10

* 0:56 - From here there was a slight harmonic disturbance between the string and the piano. However, listening to it again I'm not quite sure, might've been a fluke.

* 2:03 From here, I'm not quite sure about the layering of the strings and the piano at that moment

Other than these small details, it's great!

 

Thanks for the feedback. The crackling at 1:10 is not meant to be there. It was a problem that happened when I bounced it down. Didn’t realise until way after I uploaded it to YouTube. Your other 2 points could you elaborate a bit more? Cheers 

4 hours ago, Jonny Clifford said:

Thanks for the feedback. The crackling at 1:10 is not meant to be there. It was a problem that happened when I bounced it down. Didn’t realise until way after I uploaded it to YouTube. Your other 2 points could you elaborate a bit more? Cheers 

 

Ah, all good man, they're not that extreme, just a tiny bit too much high-end (I like to listen with a pretty loud volume when I'm reflecting on quality and dynamics)

Those two times: 0:56 and 2:03 where closest to when the dissonance are about to happen. I wish I had perfect pitch/knowledge of terminology so I could point out the exact keys and the exact part but I don't. So I'm gonna try to point it out verbally;

0:56 - If you from this moment listen to the strings: just before the strings jump to different keys, there is a minimal dissonance between that moment of the piano and the strings (right before the transition of strings). hówever; it is so small that after multiple times of repeating, I only noticed it 1 time. It could literally be a mindfuck. I wouldn't take it from me, only if someone agrees.

2:03 - if you listen to the strings from this exact moment, when they transition into different keys, I feel like thóse new keys and the piano-hit of that specific moment create a dissonance. I don't think it's flawed layering, it seems to small for that, so it might be an extremely minimal detune, or a small reverb-tail dissonance or something.

I hope I pointed it out properly, I wish I could explain it more accurately with terms. I do wanna point out that I've been too much into sound for the past couple of days so I could be completely off, again, only consider these pointers if someone else agrees.

Again, great piece, love it man, you got talent.