Theme for piano Nº7

Hi, please your expert feedback and thoughts.

Thanks!!

5 hours ago, ilv said:

Nice job overall. There were some parallel octaves, which weren't the nicest thing. However, it is okay if they're there. They're just not ideal. Avoid the use of prominent leading tones in both melody and harmony e.g 0:51., 1:8

1:29: awkward interval leap, right hand. Moving the first interval down two tones should fix it. You can vary repetitions of themes, especially repetitions occuring right after the original with no second ending.

 

Hi Ilv,

Thanks for your feedback as usual :). I have a doubt regarding the 1:29 opinion, what exactly do you mean?. I tried to make that jump softer with the dynamics, I had to achieve that chord for blending better with the next part.

Do you mean to move the thirds marked in the picture only (1) two tones? (see attached), or the whole thing?. It is the same scale, C minor, two chors of the same scale and it was on purpose as I wanted to achieve C minor again for the next part. But I am a bit lost as I tried moving the notes in the picture (1) the two tones to test how it would sound, but it didnt sound good.

Could you please double click on this point please?. Thanks!