Waltz No. 1 (in D minor)

Hey guys, this is a waltz that I wrote in D minor. It's a short piece but I tried to keep it in the form.

Please let me know your opinions about it :)

Please, share the score too, if you could!

I don’t know exactly what you are aiming for. Your waltz has very “industrial sound“, which may be perfect (or not), depending on what you want. I could envision it as a satirical waltz criticizing a technological society. It doesn’t sound very danceable, though. I have written something regarding waltzes in another thread. 

Sorry if I'm late, but this is the score. Please let me know your opinions about the score.

Thank you for sharing your score. Some comments: It is very rare to start a piece that is supposed to be in d minor with a the sixth chord , even if it is in first inversion. If you would start with (d a) and (f a) it would sound more like d minor. But you would come closer to the oom-pah-pah of waltz by  writing (d) - (f a) - (f a) instead of (d b) - (f b) - (f b). In the second bar, the bass jumps into a very low register -- I would suggest using the second inversion of the dominant seventh chord, e.g. (a) - (ef) - (ef). This is a common bass figure for waltzes. The third bar would feature again (d) - (f a) - (f a), the bass in the fourth bar would just be (a) - (c e) - (c e). The first four bars would thus close with a half cadence. 

Now, the melody is of course your choice and expresses your creativity. However, if you want to write something more akin to a typical waltz, I would suggest you use rests more sparingly and focus on a flowing melody. If in doubt, study some waltz scores at imslp.org, especially from Johann Strauss Jr. Even if you do not want to write a Viennese waltz, his waltz melodies will give you some ideas how to produce a more dance-like tune.