2nd movement of a pseudosonata for violin and piano

https://musescore.com/user/12518851/scores/4742266

The first movement is in the other uploaded works (called "Forewarning"). All feedback is appreciated!

Not so bad.

53 minutes ago, ilv said:

Could you please upload the scores here? I don't have a MuseScore account, and I'm not alone.

 

You don't have to have a MuseScore account, you just have to click on "play".

Anyway, here is the score: 

Hello Alfredo,

Actually, you have some interesting ideas, but they lack 'confidence' if you understand what I mean...
Some parts are really nice and sound very romantic!
I would recommend you to study some violin concerti and write down the simmilarities and differences between these pieces.

Some points:

• Just to be sure: a solo concerto is normally for a solo instrument and an accompanying orchestra and not a piano. However, there can be exceptions.
• If you choose for a violin and piano instrumentation, you have to place the violin above the piano.

Kind regards,

Maarten

10 hours ago, Maarten Bauer said:

Hello Alfredo,

Actually, you have some interesting ideas, but they lack 'confidence' if you understand what I mean...
Some parts are really nice and sound very romantic!
I would recommend you to study some violin concerti and write down the simmilarities and differences between these pieces.

Some points:

• Just to be sure: a solo concerto is normally for a solo instrument and an accompanying orchestra and not a piano. However, there can be exceptions.
• If you choose for a violin and piano instrumentation, you have to place the violin above the piano.

Kind regards,

Maarten

 

Thanks! I'm not sure what you mean when you say that it lacks "confidence". This is not a concerto, it's a piece loosely based on a sonata form. I have switched the piano and violin.

10 hours ago, alfredo094 said:

Thanks! I'm not sure what you mean when you say that it lacks "confidence". This is not a concerto, it's a piece loosely based on a sonata form. I have switched the piano and violin.

 

Well, you have great ideas, but they lack powerful harmony. Everything sounds like a collection of chords and not like a real 'confident' sonata piece.

Maybe you should study some Mozart and Beethoven violin sonatas.

I am sorry about my mistake about the concerto.

6 hours ago, ilv said:

What I think @Maarten Bauer is trying to say is that this isn't real music, it has little depth and that there's little musical complexity.

 

Yes, exactly!

In my opinion, "little depth" and "musical complexity" don't define what "real" music is.

I know there are stuff that is liking in my work, but "not being real music" doesn't help me to fix them in the next one.

I think as this is a piece of music, " not real music" doesn't make sense. I understand what you mean @ilv and @Maarten Bauer. I think just adding to bits will help. It just doesn't seem quite whole. I'm not sure if you know what I mean when I say that, but I can understand why you feel that it needs more depth.

Today, the definition of "music" is so wide, encompassing pieces where sound is randomly generated or the audience is invited to consider the musical qualities of ambient sounds, that I think it is difficult to say something is "not real music". As @aMusicComposer said, this doesn’t make sense and won’t help @alfredo094. 

There is a wealth of ideas in the piece - probably too many of them. I would suggest to reorganise your material so that there is more of a build-up of tension, e.g. by modulation, Fortspinnung,  introducing more voices, piling different motives on top of each other, etc. etc.,  that is then released in your final, more tranquil section. Sectional pieces don't have to feel like a mix-tape, especially if you use some motives across sections. 

I would just question your use of time signature changes. They feel a bit arbitrary and do not fit well with the style of your music. They should feel like a necessity (at least in retrospect), not a quirk.

But it is all easier said than done, so I commend you for your work and thank you for sharing it!