I wish you were mine

My main instrument is guitar (of course, after my lovely laptop!) and I enjoy when I write for guitar or play others' works on my guitar. Also, I have a deep love to rock and metal music, so tonight, after a long time, I decided to make an instrumental rock track.

There's no score unfortunately, but there's a mp3 file available!

P.S : As I can't shred well, I did shreds with computer!

Nice piece. Catchy melody in the guitar. 

Only suggestion is the drums to me were a bit uninspiring, and I'm sure it can add a little more depth and upbeat to the piece, perhaps some transitional phrases leaning to different sections. Overall good job! 

Hi.  agree with Sepharite.  When I work on a certain type of composition, Youtube is my main research tool.  I listen to a lot of material, take some notes, on various factors of the pieces that I might get inspiration, and save the link for reference as I work on the piece.  Yeah, definitely some different sections.  Then when I think I'm finished, I play it an almost infinite number of times, with a notepad..  I write down notes and ideas, 

Prince had a technique which I follow too.. Since it is only you, performing the tracks.  you have to  get out of your guitar player's mentality, to play the drums. etc..  Prince would lay down some basic tracks, then go back, and re-do the keyboard, which meant re-doing the keyboards, and then the bass, and drums, then he'd circle around again and re-do the guitar, etc.  After multiple re-doing of tracks, the piece was sometimes significantly different, and better. 

I had a manager once, and his advice to me, was to write, record the piece, then through away the weakest  90%, and then do that two times more..  I didn't always go that far.  But it certainly made the song grow and evolve..  Like you have a few sections where the guitar stands out, You could adjust the drumming and rhythm to make that stand out.  

The lead guitar is good.  I'm guessing it's a drum loop..  If you can get one of the virtual drum programs, Superior Drums, EZ drums, etc.  They consist of a lot of one, bar phrases. variations, rolls, fills, etc.  You can stack these together in the program itself or drag the one bar phrases into your DAW..  It's a bit tedious at first.  But it really gives a great drum track.

3 hours ago, markstyles said:

you have to  get out of your guitar player's mentality, to play the drums. etc..

You know the problem is that I run my one-man band, and I play and write everything (Maybe Burzum or even Uaral style :D). And the only instrument I am good at, is the guitar.

3 hours ago, markstyles said:

 I'm guessing it's a drum loop..

Not actually, It's one of FPC drums presets.

3 hours ago, markstyles said:

If you can get one of the virtual drum programs, Superior Drums, EZ drums, etc.  They consist of a lot of one, bar phrases. variations, rolls, fills, etc.

I usually use FPC drums, but for some of my aggressive works, I used "Kvlt Drums", it seems I need to study drums.

Yeah, on much of my earliest work..  sounded like an organ player doing strings, flutes, etc. It took a long time to work around that..   Pick out different instruments, and practice with them trying to duplicate them. it takes time to get out of one head space and into another.. See if you can find some good midi files and analyze, the notes and phrasing of different instruments.  it will help a lot.  

I like it! I can feel that vibe of missing "something" that doesn't belongs to you. Besides the drums (I can help you with that) and the lack of bass, I would only recommend to add some bends and add more longer notes, in order to give it more feeling. You'll refine it