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Hello guys this is my new song. I hope you like it and any criticims is welcome! :)

in this soundtrack or song.. I wanted  to put  the life  of a warrrior  after killing his enemies their souls do not leave him in piece in his mind..

 

 

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There are some interesting elements to this, though I must say as a whole the track seems to lack a lot of cohesion.

The melodies also don't feel very 'organic' is the only word I can think to use. 

I do quite like the over-all tone of the section around the 3:00 mark onward. (though it does feel like a build up to a 'climactic' section that doesn't arrive) 

I think perhaps practising with some shorter tracks/ideas with less sections along the way could be worth looking into as several minute compositions with lots of sections and changes can be very challenging to keep cohesive, especially when you're just starting out.

It's clear that there is a passionate composer within you so keep at it and keep practising! 

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13 hours ago, Slazeus said:

There are some interesting elements to this, though I must say as a whole the track seems to lack a lot of cohesion.

The melodies also don't feel very 'organic' is the only word I can think to use. 

I do quite like the over-all tone of the section around the 3:00 mark onward. (though it does feel like a build up to a 'climactic' section that doesn't arrive) 

I think perhaps practising with some shorter tracks/ideas with less sections along the way could be worth looking into as several minute compositions with lots of sections and changes can be very challenging to keep cohesive, especially when you're just starting out.

It's clear that there is a passionate composer within you so keep at it and keep practising! 

 

thanks very much for criticism!  y really appreciate your words! and yes iam novice composer.. :/ the cohecion is hard for me now...

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8 minutes ago, ilv said:

I think it's excellent background music. I think it would be nice to add melodic instruments over the percussion over the last note for a more authentic ending because the last melodic note was left unresolved in a sense.

 

Thanks! ilv! yes im novice now :( but i try to improve :)

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