Miranda

Hello All,

Please check my new piano songMiranda.mp3. I'd like to hear your comments. Thanks :)

Whats standing behind the piece? Does it have any background story?

That and the fact you didn't upload any music sheet with it makes it hard to review (at least for me).

Right now all I can say is "it sounds fine", if you want something more than that please upload the notes or at least tell the story you tried to tell or the enviroment you tried to create.

18 hours ago, Rabbival507 said:

Whats standing behind the piece? Does it have any background story?

That and the fact you didn't upload any music sheet with it makes it hard to review (at least for me).

Right now all I can say is "it sounds fine", if you want something more than that please upload the notes or at least tell the story you tried to tell or the enviroment you tried to create.

 

Hi @Rabbival507,

Thanks for your comments. Actually I didn't compose this particular song  in connection to a background story. I leave it to the listener. I'm attaching sheet score. I generated it using Musescore from the midi file and I haven't checked if the conversion is OK. I also uploded a video of the song to youtube so you can also check it. 

Miranda.pdf

It was a bit monotic for me, but maybe that's what you tried to create.

Also, if you want the piece to be playable you should fix some notation problems.

One exmple that is, to me, critical is in bar 86 where left hand is suddenly where the right hand is, which really isn't comfortable or necessary.

If it's important to you and you want the piece to be playable you should go through the notes and fix things like that.

Sorry I don't have anything truly helpful to say.

I think there is good material here. The atmospjere is nice.

some dinámica would improve it a los. 

the left hand pattern is almost fixed, that is why it sounds like that. Also, I would make the cadences clearer because there is no stop ...

On 17.12.2017 at 7:46 PM, Rabbival507 said:

It was a bit monotic for me, but maybe that's what you tried to create.

Also, if you want the piece to be playable you should fix some notation problems.

One exmple that is, to me, critical is in bar 86 where left hand is suddenly where the right hand is, which really isn't comfortable or necessary.

If it's important to you and you want the piece to be playable you should go through the notes and fix things like that.

Sorry I don't have anything truly helpful to say.

 

 

@Rabbival507 thanks alot. I think you’re right about the monotonicity. With every feedback, I learn a lot. Thanks again.

On 18.12.2017 at 12:17 AM, Luis Hernández said:

I think there is good material here. The atmospjere is nice.

some dinámica would improve it a los. 

the left hand pattern is almost fixed, that is why it sounds like that. Also, I would make the cadences clearer because there is no stop ...

 

Hi Luis, thanks for your comment. I agree with your suggestions and I will try to modify the song as you suggested after finishing the piece I’ve been working on. Your feedback is really helpfull.

1 hour ago, ilv said:

I felt like the melody sounded boring and it lacked depth.

 

Hi @ilv 

 Thanks for listening and your feedback.