The Butterfly Dance

This is a violin duet that I have written. I found the first four bars written down while looking through my manuscript paper on New Year's Day and I decided to extend it. This is written for two violins so that I can play it with my grandad. Sorry for the bad audio quality, it is a recording of me playing it on the keyboard. 

Here's a score and a better audio.

It's fine, objectively speaking. I want to introduce you to what guitarists call "guitarmony" which is basically just constant harmony by thirds and sixths to create a pleasant tone. I don't think you need to use it as much as you have. Of course you want a duet to feel like both parts are melded together, but this isn't the only way to do it. Just for future reference:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vbrVkXBGHU0

9 hours ago, Monarcheon said:

It's fine, objectively speaking. I want to introduce you to what guitarists call "guitarmony" which is basically just constant harmony by thirds and sixths to create a pleasant tone. I don't think you need to use it as much as you have. Of course you want a duet to feel like both parts are melded together, but this isn't the only way to do it. Just for future reference:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vbrVkXBGHU0

 

 

Thank you very much Monarcheon!

Regarding your 'guitarmony' comment, would more independent voices and counterpoint help to resolve this?

21 minutes ago, aMusicComposer said:

Thank you very much Monarcheon!

Regarding your 'guitarmony' comment, would more independent voices and counterpoint help to resolve this?

 

Generally speaking, yes. Playing around with timbre will also help. It's hard on software since the playback will never do what you want, but it's always good to think about.

2 minutes ago, Monarcheon said:

Playing around with timbre will also help.

Do you mean more changes to pizzicato and tremolo for example?

Mm. Kind of. Where's the bow on the string? How hard do they press there? How fast do they move their bow? Etc.

Ahh okay.

Nice piece: Everything Monarcheon suggested plus I would add that something you can play around with is not having both instruments notes moving in the same direction for a whole measure. It has been my experience that when I have my voices moving in counter motion, it adds stability to the piece. I believe you can do it without losing the butterflyish feel.

Great Job!

@ilv I called it 'The Butterfly Dance' because I was originally inspired by watching butterflies.