And Five Of You.

Usually we need to ask for a score.

Surprisingly, this time it goes the other way around.

Please upload an audio version, even if it's just piano.

It's easier to follow a score and give a feedback about it when you can listen to it.

1. Make sure to use separate layers with your internally moving chords, not just tied notes. Easier to follow that way.
2. Apart from "sword" the text setting here is a bit strange. Namely, "thou" jumping to the apex then resolving down to "-sand".
3. I'm not sure what style this is supposed to emulate, but if it's Baroque, then there a number of part writing issues to resolve in the standard practice.
Looks good, overall, if not a bit too safe.