Listen to my last cry

Dear Friends,

Can you check out my new song and give some feedback? Thanks.

Listen_to_my_last_cry.mp3

Hi Selcukoser,

You call this a song, so do you mean that it has words, verses and a chorus etc.?  As such it might make more sense, but as a stand alone piece of music, I found a bit hard to follow.

By that I mean that it didn't seem to vary very much melodically, also there's no dynamic variation which also makes it quite samey throughout.  Perhaps you could select some of your favourite passages and concentrate on taking them to new places.

Sorry to be a bit negative, obviously you have musicality, but it just needs developing a bit more I think.

Best regards

Mark

Part of the reason that it's confusing is because the phrases are irregular and not well enough defined. Plus, many bass notes in the left hand occur on weak beats, whereas if you kept them on strong beats it would help the listener make sense out of it, and it would help you as the composer as well. So it's not quite a song yet, but more of an improvisation, which as it is has a certain mood that is pleasant. Try to keep the phrases in multiples of 4 and 8, unless your melody is decicisvely asymetrical.

Dear @Mark101and @Ken320Thanks for your comments. They are quite useful for me. 😊