The lost weasel

Last year i wrote the suite ,,Four short stories for piano“. This is the second movement. (sheet pdf is attached)

To me, the first part was exponentially better than the second part (m. 11). You have a really cool atmosphere with the strange Mixolydian tonality, and the competing rhythms.
The second part is a lot more standard and a bit immersion breaking.
At 11 and 14, I would probably suggest taking out the octaves in the left hand, as it might be too easy to play those notes too loud. 17 also sports a large reach.

 

2 hours ago, Monarcheon said:

To me, the first part was exponentially better than the second part (m. 11). You have a really cool atmosphere with the strange Mixolydian tonality, and the competing rhythms.
The second part is a lot more standard and a bit immersion breaking.
At 11 and 14, I would probably suggest taking out the octaves in the left hand, as it might be too easy to play those notes too loud. 17 also sports a large reach.

 

 

Thank you Monarcheon, i appreciate your suggestions.

The main motif is quite nice.