I Don't Know, Probably Not ~ Cj Rhen

This is an original jazz band song by me, Christian "Cj" Rhen, I'm using it for college applications and performing with two bands! Tell me what you think.

This work seems a bit lonely. Could be the MIDI rendering of instruments, but it felt very sectioned off, in comparison to your other stuff. The groups that comprise the melodic and countermelodic structures were almost too obvious without much else serving as glue between them. It was also a little bit too much hearing almost every phrase end on some version of the tonic, sometimes in between phrase-ends as well. 

16 minutes ago, Monarcheon said:

This work seems a bit lonely. Could be the MIDI rendering of instruments, but it felt very sectioned off, in comparison to your other stuff. The groups that comprise the melodic and countermelodic structures were almost too obvious without much else serving as glue between them. It was also a little bit too much hearing almost every phrase end on some version of the tonic, sometimes in between phrase-ends as well. 

 

Part of it is I wrote it for a new highschool jazz band. And I put zero attention into the rhythm section as to just follow a standard 12 bar blues for the most part. I want to learn to gauge where to go depending on the group. Hearing wise, I think a student could sing their part, and be accurate and not get lost harmonically. I will eventually learn to meet in the middle. That's my goal.