Two short songs for piano

These are a couple of short simple songs that I always thought went well together, enjoy!

1

I know that there's some spicier harmony here and there,

but it felt too static for me.

Dynamics stays exactly the same, the range doesn't move much, you repeat the exact same passage three times(???)

You could keep it that way, that's just my pure opinion.

Also you should write it this way: 

Also, judging by the names, you either don't have a clear picture of what you want exactly in your head

or you're trying to make progress by writing many pieces (which is why you count them).

That's how it seems to me anyway. In both cases- give some more thought to each of your pieces.

At the beginning I thought that making many pieces would help,

but I actually achieve my progress by looking at things I've already written in a deeper way trying to understand what I can do better.

(Of course not just by that, but it's more helpful to give a deeper thought to your pieces, 

I believe that big thought can reveal the answer to the biggest question of all. If you got the reference I'm proud of you.)

2

Please stop repeating yourself so many times.

I mean, I guess it's fine depends on your musical background, it's just my personal opinion.

I think that you need to learn how to connect to things together.

Like Christophe Beck told me a few years ago:

"Your pieces sound like many ideas hastily mixed together".

Therefore, you should try and learn two very important musical subjects:

Transition and Development.

I can't even begin to cover any of them but I can recommend you to try and...

Take the main idea of the first and the main idea of the second.

Now put them 20 bars away from each other and fill the empty bars only using the two materials you already have

without repeating any of them in the exact same way. 

You could do that by taking the rhythmic ideas and mixing them, 

trying to do some modulations (scale transitions),

adding new voices, changing basses, doing whatever you want really...

as long as it has a root in your original materials.

I hope this was helpful.

Have fun reading about these two things online and practicing them.

Thanks for sharing these.

I liked the first piece more - the main theme is quite distinctive. However, I would agree that there is too much repetition for such a short piece. At the end of bar 10 I wanted the music to continue developing those contrasting ideas more, instead of returning to the beginning.

I agree with the previous comment on developing ideas - good luck and I look forward to hearing what you post next!

Thanks @Rabbival507 and  @DanJTitchener for listening/reading and  your critique!