MY misery (MIJN ellende) stringquartet

Yesterday and today I made a little musical joke called 'MIJN ellende'. Don't take it too serious :-) The melody is based on my own name, Jean Langlais made a system in wich you can interpret the letters of your name to notes. I also used a rhythm based on my the syllables name. My arrogance!!

It's pretty dramatic and sentimental. Therefore I used some subtitles. In English they are:

Bar 1 Misery on the day I was born

Bar 11 Misery on the day of my first step

Bar 21 Misery on the day of the start of my relationship

Bar 26 Misery on the day of my marriage

Bar 31 Oh! Miserable existence!  I love you!

Because misery is a consistent element throughout the piece its all the time more or less the same melody and rhythm. Do you think that works out good?

(It's my name although it's not autobiographical in case you wondered)

I find the inspiration intriguing, and the density of the texture in particular adds to the overall angst in the piece. The length of the piece is apt and I think it as a whole works nicely. Good work! 

At first I found it very jarring, but around measure 25 I stopped reading the score and started thinking what surprise is coming next? Then it became a journey I could follow. All in all I liked it.