Seraphus - Rise of Targaryen

Hello everyone.

I've just finished my new composition, it's inspired by George Martin's Fire&Blood book.

Feel free to let me know what you think.

Hey, I really loved the feel in this piece, really beautiful and sad. I just noticed a couple things which caught me out a bit. When you change to the Fdim chord, sometimes it clashes with the previous chord (B flat major) because the B of the Fdim chord has come in early while the B flat major chord is still being held. You can hear this at 1:23 . Another point is that I found it difficult to follow a particular melody through the piece because their seemed to be a few different melodies happening in the strings at the same time, aswell as no repeteing motif that I could grasp onto. I think if you have some well defined melodies that come in and out of the piece that the listener can recognise then it would make this piece even better. 

Overall it felt like it would fit well into the book 🙂 Well done. 

Thanks Ben for your great insight.

You are right about the clash of chords, I did it on purpose to make it sound more "desperate and dark" like the sound that is creeping around, there are few more points in this song where I used it. But since your reaction showed me it's noticable and it bothered you, I might change it to straight chord after all.

You are also right about the melody, I've tried a different approach - used the same chords with a little variation, but changing main part of melody or "theme".

This whole thing should lead to the last part and main theme with two cellos. But now you mentioned it, I agree there could be more of it trough song.

Anyway, thanks a lot, your insight is well appreciated :).