study in form Piano Study - Compound Ternary Form

Hi! 

This is one of my latest piano pieces. It's a study into the compound ternary form, and I would love to hear some feedback.

I programmed it on MIDI, so it coulds definately use some better interpretation. 

Here's the video!

Thank you for your attention!

There are things I really like about this piece, and things I think are really awkward about this piece. On the one hand, I really like some of your choices of chords, like the G Major at measure 10, and the attention-grabbing C Major chords at mss. 19-23. They may be simple ideas, but they're well executed, which is all that really matters.

However, the way you voice the chords are sometimes kind of painful to look at, as a pianist. Perhaps you have big hands, but there are an awful lot of 10ths that are expected to be played with the left hand. Granted, you could roll the chords, but I think rolling the chords would make the piece lose some of its "gravitas". The worst offender is ms. 71. If you have big hands, it could work, but rolling the chords will just sound bad.

But more importantly, the section starting at ms. 37 just doesn't work for the piece. I see where you're coming from, conceptually: have a ms. of intense 16th-notes, followed by a little peace. Repeat. But it works more in theory than in practice. The starting of momentum, only to immediately fizzle out, sounds unintentionally weak. (I think a development more like the B section of Chopin's F Major Nocturne would sound more fitting: a continuous stream of chords in the right hand, with fitting scales in the left.) Then comes measures 46-49, which actually sound really cool, in a rhythmically catchy semi-pop way, but also sound like they belong in a different piece entirely. But on a side note, mss. 61-64 sound pretty awesome.

Overall, I think you did a good job. I think you have great ideas! I just think the execution needs to come across as more natural. Thanks for sharing with us! 🙂

@SergeOfArniVillage

Thank's a lot for your review, and sorry for only noticing it now (I forgot to follow my post);

You actually mentioned some of my worst preocupation towards this piece: the disconection between parts.

I do feel that some of those ideas didn't belong there, and could maybe be further developed as separate pieces. 

On 9/24/2019 at 12:46 PM, SergeOfArniVillage said:

I think a development more like the B section of Chopin's F Major Nocturne would sound more fitting

I've actually gotten inspiration from that nocturne to write this B part. However, my lack of experience surely shows through my pieces, and i didn't execute it well.

On 9/24/2019 at 12:46 PM, SergeOfArniVillage said:

I just think the execution needs to come across as more natural.

This preety much summarizes my toughts towards my own music.

Once again, thank's a lot for your feedback, it means a lot. 

Best wishes, Jean.