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Hello everybody. We've got a new song out called ''Desperate''. We tried to give an 80's feel to it, acoustic ballad type of thing. Hope you guys enjoy it.

 

 

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My previous:

https://www.youngcomposers.com/t35836/new-sound-delicious-grace/

https://www.youngcomposers.com/t37009/delicious-grace-the-boy-from-memphis/

https://www.youngcomposers.com/t37305/delicious-grace-chaos-and-shame/

https://www.youngcomposers.com/t37476/delicious-grace-nocturnal/

https://www.youngcomposers.com/t37761/delicious-grace-queen-of-england/

 

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Lyrics: Desperate
 
You don’t want to talk about it
It’s getting harder to make things work out
We’ve got to find a way now!

Sometimes we lost count of all the things that matter
And we left behind
‘Cause it’s true, it’s true...

Don’t know what to say or feel
How did we make this situation so unreal?
Let’s turn the page right now!

Are you feeling lonely tonight?
What you decided?
Did make up your mind?
‘Cause it’s true, it’s true...

chorus:
Baby please don’t walk away
I’m standing my ground, Why don’t you come inside?
Hey pretty baby don’t walk away
‘Cause it’s true, what I say it’s true!

I feel so desperate
Love and hate becomo one thing inside
What are you gonna do now?

One thing I forgot to ask
How long the pain you think is gonna last?
‘Cause it’s true, it’s true...

chorus:
Baby please don’t walk away
I’m standing my ground, Why don’t you come inside?
Hey pretty baby don’t walk away
‘Cause it’s true, what I say it’s true!

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This was good!

 

Your playing and vocals are sounding okay, but there are some things that should be called to your attention. The vocals hit the right notes most of the time, but it sounds off in some places, like maybe your hitting the notes just slightly above or below the note you meant to hit. The background vocals are sometimes off key too. The voice sounds strained as well, but this is nothing that vocal practice and warm ups won't help. Also, moving too close or too far from the mic makes the melody randomly softer and louder and if that's not intentional that is something to keep mind of. The electric guitar solo is great but seems a bit rushed at times, losing the time of the accompaniment. 

 

Other than that the song is nice and structured well. 

 

Thank you for sharing! I hope this feedback helps

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On 9/24/2019 at 1:14 PM, .Em. said:

This was good!

 

Your playing and vocals are sounding okay, but there are some things that should be called to your attention. The vocals hit the right notes most of the time, but it sounds off in some places, like maybe your hitting the notes just slightly above or below the note you meant to hit. The background vocals are sometimes off key too. The voice sounds strained as well, but this is nothing that vocal practice and warm ups won't help. Also, moving too close or too far from the mic makes the melody randomly softer and louder and if that's not intentional that is something to keep mind of. The electric guitar solo is great but seems a bit rushed at times, losing the time of the accompaniment. 

 

Other than that the song is nice and structured well. 

 

Thank you for sharing! I hope this feedback helps

 

Thank you .Em for your detailed review and heads up. It means a lot to us.

We're trying our best to make those demos sound as good as we can. There are a lot more on the way.

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